--- In Your Orbit ---

--- In Your Orbit ---

A Poem by Creepy Swine Guy



I often think about you, and how it

might be to live in your gravitational pull.

I think about how the air must be

permeated with the smell of you.

I wonder what parts of my world

are arranged wrong, and what you'd

move where, to set things in order.

Most of all, despite a life you may

call chaos, I think about how secure

and content those near you must feel.

Makes me wonder if the sun has even a

clue as to its own life sustaining nature.



© 2016 Creepy Swine Guy



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This is interesting. I know you too well to not be able to see things through your eyes, but just looking at the words, this is a very visceral look at how just knowing people makes us look at our lives differently. You suggest scents to bring this person into your world or glimpse inside of theirs and then with, "I wonder what parts of my world
are arranged wrong, and what you'd
move where, to set things in order." you suggest a rearranging of thought to see from someone else's view. And, as usual, your romantic nature illuminates this person as a light...and how interesting that imagery is, since you have already shown them to be shining a light into your own life in a way, as you imagine how they might see you in your world.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Creepy Swine Guy

10 Months Ago

There's no fool like an old fool ... [Grin].
Kristina Moulaison

10 Months Ago

We are all fools.



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This is interesting. I know you too well to not be able to see things through your eyes, but just looking at the words, this is a very visceral look at how just knowing people makes us look at our lives differently. You suggest scents to bring this person into your world or glimpse inside of theirs and then with, "I wonder what parts of my world
are arranged wrong, and what you'd
move where, to set things in order." you suggest a rearranging of thought to see from someone else's view. And, as usual, your romantic nature illuminates this person as a light...and how interesting that imagery is, since you have already shown them to be shining a light into your own life in a way, as you imagine how they might see you in your world.

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Creepy Swine Guy

10 Months Ago

There's no fool like an old fool ... [Grin].
Kristina Moulaison

10 Months Ago

We are all fools.
WOW !! guy... this is beautiful... would love some one to write that about me... :).... an this

Most of all, despite a life you may
call is chaos, I think how secure and
content those near you must feel.

What a stanza

Posted 1 Year Ago



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