So Go Play

I wrote this my freshman year of high school... its about taking cover when you can.

Simon says, Simon says.

So I am forced to play.

Made to see,
Made to hear,
Made to think,

All they hold to be true.

Always being led, 
Never allowed to think,
No free will allowed to pass my lips.

But this I have learned, 
Just give them what they want,
JUST for a few short years.

Then you can forget the game

That has us all looking like fools,

Grown-ups playing children,
longing to be lead,

"So go play", Simon says,

"Don't let them see you dead."

Author's Note

i understand some of it is a little awkward, but i didn't want to rewrite it. this was the first poem i ever shared that meant something to me, and I wanted to honor that/

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

To me this painted a dark picture, ticking grand father clock in the background. The flow moved with a tint of blackness to it, which i liked very much. and the final clock strikes on the last line. Very dark, would recommend a visual with it, or larger pic. I liked it.

[J. Kell]

I really enjoyed this poem, I related to it personally. "Just give them what they want,
JUST for a few short years". I felt just like that when I was growing up. Kind of like you are doing time in prison. Excellent write.

[Sam Nona]

Geeze this is a powerful and angry poem for a highschool freshman...

[Catherine]

Wow. I love this line "Grown-ups playing children." but did you want it to be like grown ups are plaing them like manipulating, or that they are pretending to be children?

[Katie Flores]

it was how adults can act like children, without being conscious of it...

[Fabio_Cassilias]

Very well Writtin i like it..:d

[Alex Davis]

I like it a lot. the message behind it is a sound problem in todays soceity and i love the simon says analogy. my only suggestion is to make more use of that analogy. such as in the lines "made to .... Made to ...." throw in "Simon says" instead, but that repetitive effect is nice. Keep writing from the heart :)

[Laura Maidah]

"Always being led" not "lead". Lol. Marginal error. It's the grand question of all us lemming kids. And you've captured it.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I tough for a young person to realize what's good or wrong on their own, without proper guidance. But I think that those who manage to do that end up more experienced than they would have been if they were guided by someone.
I say never give them what they want, because their greed will keep on growing.
Good poem, made me think a lot.

[GunMetal]

It's gratifying to finally break away from the "Simons" of this world. If you can succeed on your own, don't let anything try to bring you down. Understand also, that we all have the potential to become those Simons in one way or another.

[MOON]

The rite of passage , the need for independence great write .