An Ocean Of Love

Well?..

Deafening silence.. Fills her mind..

Dreams and illusions... Shadow reality..

Beautiful bird.. Wounded heart...

Yearning.. To fly again...

An ocean of love... Found and lost..

Thirsty.. For just one drop..

Wings clipped.. Legs chained..

And a home that lies.. Oceans apart...

Fighting against Time.. Against life..

While they tease and test.. Her heart..

Chilling winds...  Destructive storms..

She braves them all.. With a smile...

Mad hope... Blinds my eyes...

As I try in vain.. With my soul and heart...

My delusional mind.. Walks the path..

Still denying.. That it's lost...

Confused, it wanders.. Embracing insanity..

As I walk a fine line... Between reality and sanity...

Author's Note

Please review and comment.. Thank You :)

Reviews

[RiverRei]

This is beautiful. The only thing I would suggest is change "it's" in line 16, to "it is". This just makes the poem flow a little nicer for me :) This is such a sad poem but so wonderfully written that I can't help but like it. If this is about you, I'm sorry that you have to feel this way. It gets easier! :)

[TheLostMind]

Thank you River :)I am glad you liked it.. I appreciate your kind words and concern.. Thanks again :)

[kaila]

"it's" line 16 seemed to flow fine to me. Neat poem. Enjoyable read. Thank you.

[TheLostMind]

Thank you :)

[wordman]

ahh that illusive hope for love and acceptance

[TheLostMind]

Thanks for stopping by Wordman :)

[wordman]

you are welcome

[Valentine]

Thirsty for just one drop. We all search for love, some have it given to them, others have to work for it. Valentine

[TheLostMind]

"others have to work for it." - I don't think we can ever work for it. If you work for it, then it is not love, it is just another thing "which you could get if you worked hard enough" :P.. Thank you for your kind words. :)

[Valentine]

It takes work to be kind, true, faithful, trusting, honest about everything etc. I lost my husband last year, we had a good marriage until God took him home. Kathie

[TheLostMind]

You are right. I am sorry about your loss. B blessed :)

[Jamestown]

I got divorced after15 years and boy does this piece really sound familiar!
The last stanza literally was yelling at me:( Great write! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[TheLostMind]

Am sorry to hear that.. But what must happen will happen right?. Thanks for stopping by (not sure if I should be happy because you were able to relate to this one :P).

[R Smith]

My review? Absolutely brilliant, the structure is totally new, the split of a line into two creates a double poem on each verse and the strength of this lies in its quality of a dream, the hope's and dreams herein are summed up in the final line 'Between reality and sanity' a perfect finale' to a perfect poem, thank you for this :)

[TheLostMind]

Thank you Richard.. Your insightful reviews always bring a smile on my face. Can't thank you enough. Always a pleasure to read your reviews. :)

[Ana D S M]

What a very unique delivery. How true it is, a fine line indeed.

[TheLostMind]

Thank You :)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Interesting two perspectives. One is a fiery girl who braves the world, no matter what. Her smile is her secret weapon. She's been released at last from the woes of life. One is a melancholy man. He has lost this girl. She's still in his heart so presently that he doesn't know what is real and what is not.

[TheLostMind]

You can't lose something that was never yours. Actually, the second part is about a person who is trying to help her, but can't. .
Thanks for stopping by Nadia. Your kind words are much appreciated :)

[nazia]

When you lose someone that you dearly loved its actually like a living hell. And with no one to share its easy to lose one's sanity.
I like the way you executed the whole poem in two different pieces.. Both connected together with a single cause of pain.. Bravo..

[TheLostMind]

Thank you nazia for your lovely review :). The person could be anyone you care about.. And when things don't happen the way you expected them to, you are left helpless. A mere spectator. Thanks again :)

[nazia]

You're welcome :)
Yeah and when you are helpless and unable to do anything that's really sad..

[TheLostMind]

Right :).....