Tragedy

She looks at herself in the mirror

Her appearance growing thinner and thinner

She sobs as it begins to get clearer

That death will surely be the winner

They diagnosed her with it only months ago

Her mother cried in an instant

Her father tried not to show

The feelings bottled up within him

It came by surprise

No one would have ever guessed

That a girl with such a beautiful life

Would be facing such an untimely death

She left her family behind at such a young age

Her friends and family gathered

To release the doves from their cage

In honor of the girl whose beautiful life shattered.

Author's Note

Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Raeven]

To piggyback another comment, I actually like the fact it's "hollow". Death comes for everyone, and every time it does, it's just...done. Just like a flip of a switch. Do you feel emotion when you flip a switch?

[None]

This is quite hollow. Give us something to hold on to, the disease, a personality trait, something that binds us to the girl that we are going to lose. Otherwise, its just another girl that dies from who knows what.

[bunmal]

Very touching poem, and an amazing write from someone of the age of thirteen, but that's from the eyes of a fourteen-year-old.. haha. Wonderful job!

[Owlgirl]

Emotional, beatiful, amazing!

[Tammera]

I love it. So beautiful.

[earthtohannah]

Beautiful. I love this, it's so true and just.... beautiful.

[The White Wolf]

Very sad and realistic write, my friend. Unfortunately, some children have to meet their ends far to soon. My prayers to these little ones. Very nicely done.

[Kelsy]

Nice job for the re-edict.Now makes sense to me.Good piece

[Kelsy]

'She sobs at begins to get clearer'
That's the only part i found confusing,otherwise it a nice poem-Nice and Good

[Mackenzie Brooke]

-tears- nice one