Longing

Longing

A Poem by TheMalady
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What are you thinking?

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Look into the distance
And there flashes into one's mind
A fleeting memory
A sudden rush of melancholia...
One cannot name 
How the world seemed to glow;
When the heart quietly prays
Of that long-lost song...
Lips purse
As the songs pass by;
The heart cannot hold on
For so long, so short...
Upwards, to the sky
Infinite and blue;
One's eyes seek
What one has always been asking...
-TheMalady

© 2016 TheMalady


Author's Note

TheMalady
Hullo! Want to share some thoughts? Any feedback's are always welcome! :)

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This is a good poem. I enjoy the lightness in its tone, yet it portrays feelings that go beyond the soft edges of the piece. Although, I feel as though something's missing from this. I can't exactly think of what it is, but it seems to be lacking in translation. But, as it is, it's a marvelous piece. Good work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Hi! Thanks a lot for the time in reviewing this piece. I'm glad you find this good. :)



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I think you are a very well put writer.... I write poetry but I really don't care to much for the rhythm schemes of them though..... Maybe I should educate myself....... You motivate me to become that much more of a greater poet....

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Oh my... Please don't flatter me. I am not really into tech writing. And I admire the depth of your .. read more
Tiffany K Charles

8 Years Ago

no problem.... this is what writers do..... inspire
TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Thanks a lot! You are so true! :)
Such a beautiful poem. A longing heart. "What one has always been asking..." Nicely written. Keep up the good work.


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much Celie! I really appreciate your review, this is truly motivating! :)
This is so beautiful Mal, truly leaves ones mind reeling in its loveliness.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Gosh... Thanks a lot for the review. I was listening to the song, "You Are My Hiding Place" and thou.. read more
Southern_Writes

8 Years Ago

I will have to look that song up then.
Very beautiful poem about longing for something. Just one little critique :)

Where you wrote

"Look into the distance
And there flashes into one's mind
A fleeting memory
A sudden rush of melancholia..."

I don't know if it is just me, but it seems like you are saying "there" flashes into someones mind, if that makes sense. Maybe word it a little differently so that it will show that you are referring to "melancholia".

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Well, I guess you could put it that way. Actually, I was referring to the heart. Sorry for being amb.. read more

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Added on January 19, 2016
Last Updated on February 2, 2016
Tags: Reminiscing, Thoughts, Melancholia

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