Sayonara

Sayonara

A Poem by TheMalady
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You've build up dreams under the starry night sky until farewell comes.

"






Together

Two hands intertwined.

Hearts beating in one rhythm

Under the starry night sky.



Smile

A shade of pink brushing those pallid cheeks;

Walking along the honey-colored lane

With the gentle wind caressing their skin.



Laugh

Promises borne from the blue stars above;

From afar, a lone comet disappears

Together with it were silent wishes and prayers.



Fading

All of it seemed distant dreams;

Melting into the light of day

A faint voice whispering, "Sayonara."






-TheMalady


© 2016 TheMalady



Author's Note

TheMalady
Hi! I just wanted to write down something about today. This one's a bit melancholic. Any feed backs? Anyone who can relate to this one? I'd be very happy for any thoughts. :)

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To be honest, being an anime nerd, I can't help but picture this in the ways many anime portray similar situations! I liked this piece; it's adorable and honest. We all dream and make dreams with others, but sometimes those dreams don't reach fulfillment because a good-bye had happened. Distance is funny, it's the one thing that can take a dream that's been carefully crafted and cause it to become unraveled. Nice work, Mal!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, BThomvanWart! I'm glad that it left that kind of impression to you. I really appreciat.. read more
BThomvanWart

1 Year Ago

That's awesome! I love it that much more! Haha. You're welcome! I'm glad I could stop by and check o.. read more
TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot! I'll stop by to yours and check your awesome write-ups as well! :)



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I like the way you put this poem together with the first word leaving an impact as the relationship changes from beginning to end. It's a very relatable subject as most people go through failed relationships at least once in their lives - well done! :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


To be honest, being an anime nerd, I can't help but picture this in the ways many anime portray similar situations! I liked this piece; it's adorable and honest. We all dream and make dreams with others, but sometimes those dreams don't reach fulfillment because a good-bye had happened. Distance is funny, it's the one thing that can take a dream that's been carefully crafted and cause it to become unraveled. Nice work, Mal!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, BThomvanWart! I'm glad that it left that kind of impression to you. I really appreciat.. read more
BThomvanWart

1 Year Ago

That's awesome! I love it that much more! Haha. You're welcome! I'm glad I could stop by and check o.. read more
TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot! I'll stop by to yours and check your awesome write-ups as well! :)
A beautiful poem, I loved how every stanza started with just one word. It flowed really well too.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, Lavorther! Thanks for the time you took to read this. I'm happy that you loved this. :.. read more
this poem of yours is very good. i like how each stanza was spaced to allow the build up of emotion from on line to the other. i can relate to having to say good bye to people such as my mother, and my friends in my sophmore year of high school when they all ended up moving away and ironically i moved away the year after. i still talk to them but its not the same as when we all just used to hang out. overall i think this poem is very good and that its not to long not to short and relays the feelings your feeling in a medium length poem without it seeming like their should be more.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, Gregory! I'm glad that you liked this poem and your review is very appreciated. Thanks.. read more
If I can describe this poem in one word it would be WOW.
It was cleverly written and it just runs of your tongue. I enjoyed reading it.

L.V.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, L.K! I'm glad that it m go WOW, haha. Thanks again! You really inspire me to write. :)
I liked the poem. I liked the way you set-up the poem leading to strong ending. I like the use of the one word and how you defined the word. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


The magic of a moment suspended in time where reality can't tarnish it's memory. I especially liked the imagery of 'promises borne from the blue stars above'

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot for reading! I'm glad that you like it. Your words will be a big encouragement for me :.. read more
Beautifully expressed poem. Choice of words are amazing. Captures the readers attention. Warm and inviting. Each stanza represents itself. Well written. Keep up the good work.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, Celie Rose. I'm very happy for the praises that you've given. Your time spent to read .. read more
You've got an arsenal of beautiful words...and you sure have no qualms about firing..Bravo!!!
"Sayonara"...what does it mean? I'm guessing something to do with goodbye."GOODBYE"_the saddest word of them all...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

haha, it's a condition wherein a kid's head enlarges due to the accumulation of fluid. Nah, it's jus.. read more
Krizito

1 Year Ago

No fuss over it...the spinning's over.
TheMalady

1 Year Ago

haha, okay, that's great. :)
Beautiful poem. It made me very cozy and my heart almost melted :) Suggesting works really well in this poem and tells more than saying outright possibly could. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

You're very welcome, Archos! And i'm glad that you like this poem! I'm glad that this made you cozy .. read more

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Added on January 24, 2016
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Tags: Dreams, Promises, Farewells

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