Heartbeat

Heartbeat

A Poem by TheMalady
"

There is always a first time for everything.

"






"Who are you?"



Did you not whisper those?

Under playful shadows of the Willow,

The sky closing down to dusk

While the wind howls in unison.



"Let's walk together..."



A lullaby

Drifting and swallowed 

By the beating music of heart

And splashing crimson of Love.




"Until tomorrow then."



Promises, pinky swear

Eyes flickering

As you stare straight into mine

A fleeting memory - forever it will mark.







-TheMalady 


© 2016 TheMalady



Author's Note

TheMalady
Hello! >_<

You know that sensation when you had your first time?
Well, especially when you meet someone that makes your heart go 'doki-doki?'

Any feed backs? I will be glad if you could share them. :)


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i was pinky sworn with a couple loves...but they must have had their toes crossed...false promises...but that first time is always significant...and we believe...as we grow older and become jaded---we have trouble believing...
but i like the hopeful mood of this ...the time of innocence and "maybe this is it?" feeling.

and i like those separate lines...a poem within the poem.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot! I'm glad for your honest review and for liking this poem. Again, thanks a lot! :)



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"A lullaby
Drifting and swallowed
By the beating music of heart
And splashing crimson of Love."
I really, really, really like this part. It's a really good poem all in all but this part is really what captured me ^^ well done!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, Black Rose! I am happy that this stanza capture your attention. Thanks a lot for readi.. read more
I like the bold lines in between the stanzas. You have managed to capture a beautiful moment in only a handful of sentences. Really impressive.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, friend! I'm glad you liked this. I really appreciate the time you've given to read thi.. read more
The wording in this piece is majestic, lovely from top to bottom.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, Insight! I'm glad you find this majestic. It really is an honor to be praised in such .. read more
Insight

1 Year Ago

You are welcome, and it's well deserved.
I love this style! The imagery of the flickering eyes was amazing!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, Martin! I'm happy you liked this. Thanks for the awesome read! :)
i was pinky sworn with a couple loves...but they must have had their toes crossed...false promises...but that first time is always significant...and we believe...as we grow older and become jaded---we have trouble believing...
but i like the hopeful mood of this ...the time of innocence and "maybe this is it?" feeling.

and i like those separate lines...a poem within the poem.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot! I'm glad for your honest review and for liking this poem. Again, thanks a lot! :)
This is great! Amazing work!1

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks Kira! I'm very happy that you like this. And thanks again for taking your time to read this p.. read more
i loved it ! you did such a great job it was very deep and i instantly got the message

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, N.C! I'm glad you loved this. :)
Naajia Collins

1 Year Ago

your welcome
Such a beautiful piece of work, full of wonder and mystery. I love it. Full ratings dear friend.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, dear friend! I am happy that you love this. :)
A magical moment in time. Memories, love your way, it's fresh and hopeful. Thanks for the picture now playing in mind...

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, Greg Agee! I am happy that you love this. :)
Great poem!!
I loved it!
Keep on writing!!

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

1 Year Ago

Thanks a lot, Emily. I'm glad you liked this one.

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Added on January 24, 2016
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Tags: Innocence, Heartbeat, Bloom, Memory

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