Amnesia

Shadows or Intruders?

I close my eyes, secluded in the memories.

The curtain falls as the suspense builds up,

but there is no ideal solution behind it.

 

Just a lingering scent in my mind's eye.

In secrecy it untapps the seal within me.

I still posses no knowledge of the universe.

I still do not perceive the cores of my existence.

 

The magic has vanished from the box,

maybe I've used it all, or maybe there never was any.

There is nobody to save you but yourself.

Everyone ends up dead, one way or another.

 

The music seizes, but still plays on in my head.

There is no why.

The question got lost in the answer

and the answer in the depths of consciousness.

 

Diving into the endless theories,

I starve for truth, but all I find is lies.

It is not what it seems, it never is.

It is not what I think, nor what you think.

 

A blank page with emptiness printed upon.

A clueless white swallowed by the night's dark gown.

The unknown echoes in my ear,

and I'm not supposed to hear it.

 

They say its all hidden inside, forgotten.

They say all I need is here and now.

They say and they always will.

I am free to believe what I want.

 

I believe in nothing.

Amnesia.

 

 

Reviews

[Kasey Jones]

Overall, I love this. The imagery is fantastic, and it's very descriptive and passionate. It flows so well, too. But, there are quite a lot of spelling mistakes. I won't sit here and list them all, since that would be annoying, but just look it over a few times. Great job.

[RitaMargarita]

i love your style, but from time to time it gets hard to catch the rhythm and hence the rhyme)

[Cassiopia Summers]

I like the image you've created here. The image of a black hole within the mind, hearing things your not supposed to hear, free to believe any lie within, what you want.

Creative, I shall applaud you.

*round of applause!!* [=

[SilentDreamer]

Very creative idea, I loved pretty much the whole poem. Awesome job :) :)

[Aven]

I really like this poem, but I ADORE the ending. It had an even greater effect because of the gap you left between.

They say and they always will.
I am free to believe what I want.

I believe in nothing.
Amnesia.

silence and then - applauds.

[Carter Dae]

Very emotionally moving piece...or maybe I'm just digging too far...either way, fantastic work. I love prose with a dark undertone, but I get a different sense of sentiment from it. Discarding the "amnesia" aspect of it, I find it oddly mesmerizing in the sense that I can identify with it all too well. It's like you're writing my thoughts in a beauteous solemn melody. Loved it!

[Jersey]

I really liked this one. It really kept my attention and a feeling of I want to read more as I looked it over. The poem is really good, it gives information that makes the reader wonder and then understand what you are saying.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

captivating imagery~ like a stage play with a single scribe in front of blank curtains aching to imprint the fabric with reason~ excellent~

[Matthew Kult]

see Kasey Jones review. Few spelling errors. Very surreal. Great read. Well done.

[Ruth]

I like this a lot :)
I like the unique slant to this, forgetting everything to the point of Amnesia almost! Clever piece of writing, awesome!
xx