Sirens

Sirens

A Poem by TheRavensWoods
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I haven’t written a poem in many years. I used to write them all the time but I don’t think I’m very good at them. I want to improve my writing in every way including poetry.

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As a siren pierces the air

 Wailing like the cry of a banshee

 I hold my breath and

 Think

 Over and over 

 The siren isn’t for him 

 The siren isn’t for him

 The siren isn’t for him

 My mantra repeated 

 Over and over 

 The siren isn’t for him

 The siren isn’t for him 

The siren isn’t for him 

 He’s okay, he doesn’t need help

 He will be home 

 The siren isn’t for him 

 The siren Isn’t for him

 The siren isn’t for him 

 The siren was for him.

© 2018 TheRavensWoods



Author's Note

TheRavensWoods
Please let me know what I can do to improve. Thank you for reading!

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Good job at bringing me into the emotions of the piece. Keep it up.

Posted 4 Months Ago


TheRavensWoods

4 Months Ago

Thank you very much!
that was really good, the presentation was incredible :) amazing job :)

Posted 4 Months Ago


Justin

4 Months Ago

your welcome, keep it up and i will continue to read and comment!!!!
TheRavensWoods

4 Months Ago

I appreciate it!
Justin

4 Months Ago

your welcome, if u get a chance please check out my writing, thanks
In my opinion, there's nothing you need to do to improve this poem. I really enjoyed it as it is. It is a very interesting style.

I also like poems that leave me a bit breathless at the end, and poems that keep me thinking. I think you did a great job on this one :-)

Yari

Posted 4 Months Ago


TheRavensWoods

4 Months Ago

Thank you very much! I appreciate your kind words.
OOOO the ending hit hard! But I thought this was a very effective short poem. The repetition of 'the siren isn't for him', gives the same feeling of urgency that the ambulance's noise does. I expect many say a mantra when they hear that sound. Well done.

Posted 4 Months Ago


TheRavensWoods

4 Months Ago

Thank you very much for your kind review.
Great Aunt Astri

4 Months Ago

yu are welcome
You told part of a story in the poetry. Left the reader with the want to know and understand more. The siren. Deadly song and usually the last one. I enjoyed the flow of thoughts and the end. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 4 Months Ago


TheRavensWoods

4 Months Ago

Thank you very much! I appreciate the encouragement.
Coyote Poetry

4 Months Ago

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.
Wow banshee, creatively thought up, . I have a young sonny who was nearly killed in a building collapse and it was a day several others died and ambulances wailed all day, and this poem struck a cord as now I always jump and hearken when I hear sirens hoping n praying it's not any such tragedy again. So thumbs up for this poem from the heart. Keep writing pal. Take care.

Posted 4 Months Ago


TheRavensWoods

4 Months Ago

Thank you for your encouraging words. I appreciate it.
Doubt yourself not! You’ve expressed a feeling played out by so many, to include myself. The siren sounds, I hear it and pray it’s not calling for someone I know. I close my eyes and repeat those words, as you have. Very well done.

Posted 4 Months Ago


TheRavensWoods

4 Months Ago

Thank you so much! I was really nervous posting this. Your comment made me feel much better about it.. read more
Taino

4 Months Ago

I feel poetry is extremely personal. If you enjoy doing it don't let anyone deter you. Please keep w.. read more
TheRavensWoods

4 Months Ago

I agree with you that poetry is very personal. Thank you! I will.

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Added on January 5, 2018
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