Raining

You told me

that you'd love me.

We had dated.

Seemingly fated.

Yet it's raining

We had hold hands shamelessly

We had kissed.

Together perfectly.

My heart still beats.

However, the rain won't stop.

Is it love I feel?

Or the mask I wore.

To fufill the expectations.

Not knowing nor think of limitations.

It will always rain.

If it rains then I will know it's true and hurtful.

Author's Note

Miao~

Reviews

[CountNicholasAlti]

There are a few simple errors in here, such as "you've love me" should be "you'd love me", and "we had held hands shamelessly," "not knowing nor thinking of limitations" and the last line, I'd recommend changing "if" to "When" and eliminating "then" and replacing it with a comma. This poem can use some more raw, personal emotion, and it could be a strong piece.

[TheSearcher]

Sorry was in a hurry to do this since my time was limited and my english has been deteriorating since the coming of my oh so great college experienced english teacher......

[Stephen]

I love the ending of this piece. Lovely written, the emotions of yours expressed the love of yours. Love's shameless and it's true but to make it true, we gotta treat love true.

Nice poem!