What it once was

Having nightmares of your untroubled sleep
With every conviction of my heart, my sad eyes begin to weep
Tossing and turning with the thought of your peaceful rest
Day after day, this convicted heart is put to the test

You said good bye and let go
When I tightly hold on and yearn just to get the chance to say hello

Now I cry myself to sleep
But you’ve already been down that road
I’ve fallen in so deep
I can no longer bear to carry this heavy load

Never took the time to truly get over you
You, I never took the time to miss
In and out of futile relationships
To take my mind off of the longing for your kiss

But now those times are gone
My frivolousness is done
And my heart pains to be with you
It longs to cease being blue

These lips thirst for your gentle touch
And these sad eyes ache to stare into yours
The lack of these desires is just too much
My ever-growing pain seems to be leaking through my pores

Because it shows upon my weeping face
And it reveals itself through my lack of concentration
Leaving me without a trace
Of happiness, but plenty of desperation

Desperation to be with you
Wrapped in your comforting embrace
Rather than alone and blue
Dreaming of your handsome face

I know it’s all my fault but that doesn’t help the pain
There’s nothing I can do for this broken heart that’s been slain
You won’t talk to me
You try not to even look at me

Used to make me laugh
But now your memory makes me cry
My heart’s been split in half
I’d much rather die

So without you, I must say good-bye to you all
This necessary act, I can no longer stall
It’s much easier to slice through this tainted flesh
Than live through this hell of being depressed

So if I’m not here when you awake
Don’t be sad or long for my embrace
Don’t let me trouble your sleep
Just remember the guy who fell in too deep

Follow the actions of the one that I loved
And forget about the girl, you once may have dreamed of
Because she’s gone, I died inside
I let go just like her
And my pain, I could no longer hide

But the difference is, I let go of everything and everyone
The pain came and never left
I knew that my life was done

Reviews

[A.E. Surdam]

:) Great job! I enjoyed this one. Great descriptions and imagery.

[NickyGL]

Amazing work, but then again most of your work if not all of it is amazing. You truly have a gift, writing. This poem is filled with emotions, hurt, pain, lost love, its beautiful! Really well done, nice work! This is truly some of the best stuff I've ever read.

[Kathryn]

filled with raw emotion, and again, you have managed to rhyme without damaging the flow. In fact, the constant structure adds to the power of the piece. well done :)

[State of Grace]

This is so powerful and emotional! Great job! :)

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

I thought this was gorgeously bittersweet. It might flow better if you made the same lines rhyme throughout, rather than unexpectedly changing it up, but it's great as is. I loved the four lines beginning with "These lips thirst for your gentle touch."

[DearSweetAgony]

Okay 3 problems with this poem.
#1:I LOVE the last verse!
#2:Each verse is made of true emotion.
#3I'm pissed cause I didn't write it first!
Great Job!
(but then again what did I expect?)

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this is really powerful! O.o amazing work!