Underneath the Lone Streetlight

Love and longing and patience.

Your eyes from mine they break away,

Their beauty I know not

And leave me but to speculate

What worlds therein may be contained 

Author's Note

more to come, unfinished. Does it paint a picture of a moment that you can easily see? In regards to emotion, what do you feel as the reader?

Reviews

[Alchemist]

I liked it. I am reminded of a love that I had thought was the perfect one, only to have her turn her face away from me forever. I will never see the landscapes of her soul.

[ThisWriter'sHeart]

Thanks, beautiful image with "landscapes of her soul", very similar to how i felt.

[StrixNebulosa]

I like it... it is hard to pin an emotion now that you have said it is unfinished.... but, if I take this piece alone... I feel the "speculation" thaw "know not" is the result of the eyes "breaking away" I read it and it felt like death under a streetlight... like a final detachment. Then added "what worlds therein may contained" made me question if you were going to the same place... maybe because of belief structure? I actually like it on its own that way... then I read "unfinished" and it took away that notion... it is a good piece and if it grows than Im sure its not about my first thoughts of it... it has feeling... it is sad and lovely at the same time. Im sure its growth could be great, but to me the question it holds as it stands alone is great in itself.

[ThisWriter'sHeart]

Thanks for the review. I think as i add more on the overall feeling will move away from final detachment, but as it stands right now I understand that interpretation. Can you elaborate on the "going to the same place" statement, im interested in it.

[StrixNebulosa]

yes, if your beliefs were in line and the same. as to saying you would never see each other ever again even in the afterlife.