Depression

My most noticeable expression
I don’t know what it’s caused by
Maybe it’s because people lie
Could it be that nobody cares
Or is it from all of these cuts and tears
All of this depression makes me feel so blue
But there’s one person I can look up to
This person treats me with respect
When all I do is neglect
This person shows me love
When all I do is push and shove
This person is my Father
But I just feel like a bother
He deserves more
Than just a son whose attitude is poor
You deserved to be listened too
Everything that I am saying is true
I love you Dad
I know that in the past I’ve been bad
But I want to make it up to you
Anyway that you choose
You are the Yang to my Yin
The Coke to my Gin
Dad, I love you
Do you feel the same way too?

Reviews

[Stacey]

Wow, that is such a sad, but well written poem, and very touching. I wish the same could be said about my family. I wish we had that closeness. My mom and I always fight, and I'm not close with my stepfather or sister. I do some other family I'm close to though. But I'm tangenting off, as uaual. Very well written with a touching ending.

Stacey

[Brandon Bretsnyder]

Thank you so much :)

[SuMM3rGiRl777]

This one is really good. I love it. It's deep. ^_^

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem a lot.
"You are the Yang to my Yin
The Coke to my Gin
Dad, I love you
Do you feel the same way too?"
The above lines were very good. Life does teach us. We must appreciate the people who cared for us. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[costa siwale]

Indeed this is sad but well written poetry. So much emotion, that's what gives poems their spark. Well done

[costa siwale]

Indeed this is sad but well written poetry. So much emotion, that's what gives poems their spark. Well done

[costa siwale]

Indeed this is sad but well written poetry. So much emotion, that's what gives poems their spark. Well done

[The Archangel Gabriel]

A sacred gift
A pleasant game
Player?
Play him not.
Hear him out.
So many good things to say!
A wonder child, a wonder gift

Sad to say;
I have to say it
The best thing I like for free
The Best THING I LOVE FOR FREE
The best THING I LOVE for free
The best thing I love for free is me!


A hahahhahaa poem!

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Well said. Please share this with your father. Thankyou for being the first person in my contest. Hope you wrote it in real time. I can't really tell. Writing the typing to the beat. Did you comply? You write in real time? If not, it is still great. Have your tried Zoloft? It seems to help a lot of people. You can answer in private or not at all, of course. A wonder drug. If you need to talk, don't hesitate to call. Over and out, Gabe.

[Brandon Bretsnyder]

What do you mean by "real time"? And no problem. :)

[The Archangel Gabriel]

I mean by "real time" that you write the poem or type it as you speak it. You do the work in real time. It sounds like you did not. Oh, that wasn't a requirement for this contest, I think. Regardless, that was beautiful work. I had to try on my last real-time contest to guess whether people complied with the rules. I hope I got it right!

[Brandon Bretsnyder]

I did write this in real time, by the way. :)

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Okay, you did write this in real time. I used to explain this in my webare. Good. Then, you are in the competition, and it shoudl do well. You did well, espeicaly for 15. Please send to dad, and consider low-cost flowers at times if you can afford them. 5 bucks? I am hurting... Okay, then!