Stainless Steel Tears

I'm so sorry that I will never be the perfect little girl that you want me to be. [LANGUAGE WARNING]

I can tell that you're lying,

I can see it in your eyes

You always say you love me,

But I wouldn't be surprised

If you were feeding me broken promises--

And I promise I won't break

But that won't stop me from cracking

When it's just too much to take

You really think you know me?

You really think you care?

Have you seen the past and what

Made me look back there?

You really think you love me?

You really think it shows?

Well look down and see the stainless steel

Tears that dot my clothes

I can tell that you hate me,

I hear it in your voice

You ask if I want to be like you,

But do I really have a choice?

Stop shoving lies down my throat

And filling me up with guilt

I know that this was not the way

I was meant to be built

You really think you see me

For who I truly am?

Have you seen the way I've cried

And how you just don't give a damn?

You really think I wanted

To become a dangerous monster?

Did you look through the ugly truth

And see your weeping daughter?

I can tell you want me

To be exactly like you are

Because you tipped away all of my dreams

Like the end of a cigar

Do you really think you know

Your children oh so well?

Did you really believe that they

Didn't live a life like hell?

Do you really think my tears

Are all because of joy?

How long did you believe you could play with my emotions

As if I were a toy?

I can tell that you're lying,

I can see it in your eyes

You always say you love me,

But I wouldn't be surprised

If you were feeding me broken promises--

And I promise I won't break

But that won't stop me from cracking

When it's just too much to take

So let me say one more thing

Before I run off to keel:

As long as you treat me like this,

I won't know how to feel

Author's Note

If you see any grammar or spelling mistakes, please tell me. Also, if you liked this piece, I'd love to see what you think about it. Thanks.

Reviews

[luvs2write]

Wow. The way you put your emotions into words is beautiful. I think when I try to get my feelings out it turns into a rant and loses it's poetic form, but yours don't. This is amazing! When you said "filling me up with guilt" it made me think of manipulative relationships. They're so confusing, and you always feel like the one that's wrong...even when you aren't. I don't know...I guess that's just kind of what I took from it. Great work though, I really like this. And the title is perfect too. =)

[iNSOMniAC]

Thanks! :3

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Only the heartless could not render the emotions from your words. This is beautifully written. Thanks for sharing.

[iNSOMniAC]

Thanks for the review. c:

[Mai L Nissen]

I love it! It is heartbreaking...
'Stop shoving lies down my throat
And filling me up with guilt'

this really gives you an idea of the dynamics in the relationship, with an either conscious or unconscious manipulation or reversal of the issue by the mother... making the speaker feel misunderstood and unloved. The feeling of not being seen as you are....

[iNSOMniAC]

Thank you! :3
That's the whole message in the poem itself - I wrote this to get all of my emotions out and do so by completing a hobby of mine.

[Mai L Nissen]

It is also a more constructive way of dealing with non-constructive situations :)

[iNSOMniAC]

You have a way with words, Miss. I realized that you often compare things that are the opposite to what they truly are - and I love it. c:

[Jennifer Smalls]

Wow! I really felt this...

[iNSOMniAC]

Thank you. :D

[Nene]

the first 7 stanza's are how i feel right now... You really gave words to emotions!!!!

[iNSOMniAC]

Thanks. :3

[Nene]

your welcom

[Queenie]

I really like this poem, its very beautifully written and evokes a lot of emotion! Well done!

[iNSOMniAC]

Thank you. c:

[The StoryTeller]

Beautiful, and this should make you think of my comment I left talking about this. Now that I've read it, I know that you know it, and I know that you must choose to believe. You DO know how to feel. We've talked about that now, and now, you know how to feel. And I'll be here with you every step of the way, ready to transmogrify your stainless steal numb tears into regular tears and wipe them away, and be here to keep them and you from falling, or just to pick you up afterwards and stay with you even still.

[iNSOMniAC]

T-Thank you, Blade... c':

[The StoryTeller]

No problem. I'm here. :)

[Aspala]

By far my favorite. I can feel the emotions in this piece. Good job

[Lizardo]

You know, I went throught like this although in my case the girl put me with false wings to sky and cold night on a friday took me down telling me she had a boyfriend... So I kind of know the feeling of this poem
Well describe, it is really good and awesome

[iNSOMniAC]

I love reviews like this!
When readers tell me how my work made them feel, I can see just what my writing can do. This poem was actually based on how the relationship between my parents and I is - they expect me to be the perfect little princess they've always wanted, and I expect them to grow up and be real parents. I guess neither of us will get what we want.
Anyway, thanks for the review! I love seeing how I can impact others with my literature!

[Lizardo]

You're welcome!