Childs cry

Childs cry

A Poem by Alexa Aiden
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For the love of parents, it never ends.

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I am a cocoon in her arms
Buried safely against her
Embracing her; and her with I
she is the fire that protects me
to burn whoever would try to possess me
to scorn the masses of people who could harm me


mother


I am a cocoon in his arms
Buried safely against him
Embracing him; and him with I
he is the fire that protects me
to burn whoever would try to possess me
to scorn the masses of people who could harm me

father

© 2010 Alexa Aiden



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Great poem, it definitely shows the love you can see mother's and father's have for their children and yet also the love children can have for their parents. Creative idea written in an interesting way. Great job.

Posted 8 Years Ago


I think you way this is written is a wonderful idea. The contrasting mother and father verses are well constructed. A beautiful poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Beautiful imagery, the feeling of the child's adoration and reliance on their parents is very strong. The structure works well and the rhythm is flawless. Your use of language creates a warm feeling of safety and family, and the repeated lines give a really nice effect. Brilliant piece and very enjoyable read ^-^

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is lovely. It's simple, but pure. It brought a smile to face. I adored this line "to burn whoever would try to possess me" Simply beautiful.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I like the mirror aspect of this poem and the sing song way it is written. Also love the image of "I am a cocoon in his/her arms buried safely against him/her". the two stanzas are repetitive, but nicely so. I think it works.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I enjoyed the repititon of both poems. It was nice. Changing it to he after she. My favorite line is "she/he is the fire that protects me" It was the one line that sort of stuck with me. The line seems different and it flows together nicely.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Two nice little poems.
The metaphor 'I am a cocoon in her/his arms' works really well in these poems.

Posted 9 Years Ago


It's simple but very well written. Seems very sincere, I hope you do share this relationship with your parents since it is rare to come by theese days.

Posted 9 Years Ago


this is pretty good. and normally i am into the whole rhyming thing, but i like this. keep up the good work.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This seemed very sincere, and that's what was great about. I liked how the descriptions were the same with both the mother and father also. And this was VERY well-written. Simple, but very effective and touching. I loved it.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Alexa Aiden
Alexa Aiden

Hollywood, CA



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Hello world, my name is Alexa and I want to discover you. I'm a tea drinking, music obsessed, book gazer. And i'm a little freak. I walk the world with an open mind and a costume on. Art has taken ove.. more..

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