River of Life

The current is strong

My body is weak

As I fight the battle created

By the river of life

 

I paddle hard

With all my might

Not allowing to be consumed

By the river of life

 

I kick to no avail

Clinging to the surface

despite the power presented

By the river of life

 

I hold my head up high

Refusing to be overtaken

Fighting to leave behind the strife

By the river of life

 

 

Reviews

[Abdul Aziz]

Life does tend to drag us down, and drown us in despair. I like the really optimistic tone of the poem, and it says a lot about the character of the poet! The simplicity of the poem enhances its strength, and, as a result, the poem packs quite a punch. Quite inspiring!
Great job.

[JustWantLove]

I only wonder, truly, how you felt at the time of this composition; what's written here displays a multitude of things that we simply overlook in daily life. The current of life speaks of the unstoppable force of life, life itself and the battle against its forces. I immediately applied this to myself and understood that I, should let go and let life take me down the path it so chooses. Freedom, to let go and live and let live.

And then the continuation about the highly held head standing strong with refusal for an overwhelming force to take it. Simply throws me further out in the desolate ocean to drown in thoughts and pondering .. to me, its a fantastic philosophical and practical approach to thinking about a life that we live. And so, I congratulate you on a piece of inspirational gratitude that leaves me in a state of brainstorming, and challenged..

Bravo!!

[Emily?]

I think most people could relate to this poem. Very nice, and thoughtful! Great write!=)

[Jmartins]

It is good message for all type of people..! you are a really good writer i LOVE!! your writeing

[Samuel Dickens]

A good metaphorical description of the struggle we all participate in. The trick, I think, is to just stay afloat. no matter what. The river can drown you, but it can also take you places.

[Angel Veselinov]

River of life is always pushing you around don't let it do that to you good message :)

[Dillon Cotter]

This is a deep struggle of keeping your life. Its really good and a scary part in life to face. Great job.

-Will

[Nicole]

This is really really good.
The message in this was portrayed really well.
Reading this made my day, and thank your for the kind review. :)

[Bare trees]

Your description is that of one who's battle is ongoing. You hate it but you keep trying despite the stress and odds against you. A good description with a good theme. Again you've written something we can all identify with and you've done it well.

[StoryTailor]

Hm... *thinks* Well, you're determined, you're strong, and you're hopeful (in this poem). I liked the emotion. Don't give up, don't let it take you! Heh.... that's it I suppose. Good job.