SORE THUMB

SORE THUMB

A Poem by DIVYA
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A bit of nonsense again :)

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The moon whizzed past the earth
Ruffling her sundry seas
The earth cried aloud
Moon always does this to me

Wagging a pale finger at earth
the moon bid her to confirm
to the great celestial norms
If she didn't want such
routine tremors and storms

You stick out like a sore thumb
in the sky, with your multi-hued face
As for your swinging moods
its hard to keep up the pace

Now if you just played cold
and dead like the planets all
You could shine as Venus a doll
No winter, no summer or fall

So shed your warmth, die inside
On the outside, glitter as ice
Jettison the blue-green oceans
Char the fancy jungles of spice

Earth smiled at the moon to wait
Let her bask in her verdant state
All wasn't lost after all
A bug in her called 'man'
May soon be sealing her fate
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© 2017 DIVYA



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I actually couldn't word a review better than what jacob did for this piece, for what he said actually makes a lot of sense. I loved the imagery of your poem and it's subject matter. Great word choice Divya, I'm not familiar with many Indian writers except for my friends father Majrooh Sultanpuri, if you know of any veterans I should check out let me know :)

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks a lot for appreciating this poem Keegan. Wow! You know Majrooh Sultanpuri...one of the greats.. read more
KeeD

3 Weeks Ago

He was my friends grandfather and I never met him personally but i'm very good friends with his gran.. read more



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Wow. Lovely piece. And really enjoyed it. And this one,
"All wasn't lost after all".
And this doesn't really seem no-sense to me, Divya. It was so good!.


Posted 2 Weeks Ago


Yes, that invasive little bug with so many likeminded associates, is certainly causing mother earth a lot of pain and angst and sister moon is concerned !

Clever and creative metaphor Divya, this is a quite brilliant and very astute analogy, penned with more than a hint of conservation and concern for our beautiful planet!!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Indeed Tom...If the bug goes on biting, the earth will soon be just another lifeless planet in space.. read more
I suppose when you keeping stripping the earth of everything she needs. This is what befalls us.
Man has not made a good job of the earth we inhabit for such a short time. Mind you, he's even managed to turn the moon into a scrapyard.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Paul Bell

3 Weeks Ago

Why mess up just the one planet, when other worlds are our oyster. ( Read that in the manifesto. )
DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Ok but what about aliens ;( ?
Paul Bell

3 Weeks Ago

Aliens would run a mile from earthlings. lol
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English is my only language and I still have to keep my words simple.....
This has an easy flow, good rhyming and leaves the reader thinking as to what lays ahead for mankind

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

I loved English as a child and at school. I feel it is at its most beautiful when simple...I aapreci.. read more
you said English is your third language so youd keep your work simple. gurl this was fantastic, it doesnt seem from any angle that English is your third language. this was so beautifully written and intricately expressed. wonderful !!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you for such appreciation Pia. I am grateful to English for giving me the scope to express nys.. read more
I actually couldn't word a review better than what jacob did for this piece, for what he said actually makes a lot of sense. I loved the imagery of your poem and it's subject matter. Great word choice Divya, I'm not familiar with many Indian writers except for my friends father Majrooh Sultanpuri, if you know of any veterans I should check out let me know :)

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Thanks a lot for appreciating this poem Keegan. Wow! You know Majrooh Sultanpuri...one of the greats.. read more
KeeD

3 Weeks Ago

He was my friends grandfather and I never met him personally but i'm very good friends with his gran.. read more
The rythmic lyricism and musicality in this excellent poem cloaks the seriousness of it's content. Lovely form, flow, rhyme, imagery, personification. Earth and moon in a profound contest. Who wins? No-one. Last two lines seal the deal. Amazing poem DIVYA!

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

4 Weeks Ago

Thank you dear Annette. I hope earth wins everytime. You words elate and encourage me so much...
Annette Pisano Higley

4 Weeks Ago

You are so welcome DIYA- I hope so too!
perhaps this recent eclipse...the full one, had something to do with all this crazy weather, hurricanes, earthquakes etc.
something has to give...and unfortunately it is in a big way...your so called "nonsense" here makes much more sense to me than you might imagine...
the man in the moon is mad about something and is wreaking havoc.
j.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

4 Weeks Ago

I sincerely hope there is an end to it somewhere. Thank you for such kind words, Mr. Jacob.

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