HAZE

HAZE

A Poem by DIVYA
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The last line suggested by Mr. Jacob. Thanks a lot sir.

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Smoke is often deadly

Second hand smoke even more so

Hurt just as potent



© 2017 DIVYA



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DIVYA
Not too happy with the last line. Any suggestions please?
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maybe "the hurt just as potent"---i suggested this because i see this as a metaphor...not just about actual cigarette smoke...

i see it as second hand hurt...the indirect pain caused by people's actions.
and more to do with lies...than actual smoking.
j.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

So true Mr. Jacob...I love the suggestion! Thanks a lot for the kind review and your thoughts on thi.. read more



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I read this yesterday and I kept thinking of the real meaning behind it, today I read it again, and again I think how smoking affects badly those who smell it, more than those who smoke.

Posted 7 Hours Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

4 Hours Ago

I was thinking of the obvious and not so obvious deleterious effects of smoke, my friend. Thanks a t.. read more
Painfully yours dear.......

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

Thanks a lot for your words :)
Try putting "is" between Hurt and just.

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much for the visit and the suggestion sir.
It's not just the deliberate and direct that can cause offence, the ' fall out' from such actions linger on and consume the soul!

A brief but profound 'smoke & mirrors ' prose, intellectual in essence !

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for your thoughts on this piece, dear Tom.
Truly said as it portray information accurately

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you very much for stopping by :)
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Gee
Blow me a slow death..

Never understood the fascination with smoking, burning your hard earned cash to try and fill your lungs with tar.....weird

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Perhaps, its the high...sometimes I'm tempted to take up smoking or anything to animate this jammed,.. read more
My entire family, besides me, smokes.. so this is a battle I face everyday haha. I love how this entire piece can be used as a metaphor for indecision to take action.. for example bullying.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Personally, I don't feel smoking is as damning as its made out to be. I see all those cute seventy- .. read more
maybe "the hurt just as potent"---i suggested this because i see this as a metaphor...not just about actual cigarette smoke...

i see it as second hand hurt...the indirect pain caused by people's actions.
and more to do with lies...than actual smoking.
j.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

So true Mr. Jacob...I love the suggestion! Thanks a lot for the kind review and your thoughts on thi.. read more
I stopped smoking cigarettes ten years ago. I know that my smoke bothered many...and my body as well. Well written, Divya. Lydi**

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you so much for the kind review dear Lydi.
Lethal, acrid vapor? Love it the way it is though! &'hate smoke!!:(:(

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

3 Weeks Ago

Indeed Annette...Smoke has few pleasing properties to it save perhaps killing mosquitoes and pests :.. read more
Annette Pisano Higley

3 Weeks Ago

You're welcome DIVYA!

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