FOR BETTER OR WORSE

FOR BETTER OR WORSE

A Poem by DIVYA
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For better or worse

she wants to touch his axe

*Drink from his cup, his horn

stroke his battle stained feet

 

For better or worse

She wants to know 

why he draws his sword 

why he chases his beasts

 

For better or worse

she wants to descend

into his cold, aphotic world where

he dwells alone with his truth

 

For better or worse

She wants to nuzzle

the stygian mares that neigh

and gallop in his dreams

 

For better or worse

she wants to trace

the strings of the harp that

plays his darkest symphonies

 

For better or worse

she wants to peel away the frost

that thickly coats his breath

so she can feel his warmth beneath

  

For better or worse

she seeks his heart

not for herself 

but just to know where he bleeds


© 2018 DIVYA



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DIVYA
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Featured Review

Very nice; extremely high quality writing.

There's a problem with the 8th line though. It doesn't make grammatical sense as it currently stands. If you were to say 'why he chase his..." you wouldn't sound right.

I think I'd go with "and why he chases his beasts" or something like that.

It's all pretty flawless besides that one line.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Months Ago

Hi David....
So nice to see you here. This will always be my all time favourite write for me... read more
David

2 Months Ago

It's always my pleasure.

(I think the new 8th line would read even better without "an.. read more
DIVYA

2 Months Ago

Yes, indeed. It does.... :)



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Poetry of this caliber is what poetry is all about. You've penned a classic, something fitting of another time so very long ago. I compliment you on the prowess of your muse. This exceeds top notch for me!

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


I love medieval movies and this threw me into a scene with a mighty warrior and a damsel in distress who has just fallen head over heals in love with him and wants to peel him down to find what lies beneath - you did a fabulous job with this poem :)

Posted 2 Months Ago


DIVYA

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much Carolyn. Your review made my day.
did you base this on a king or a prince or someone you know
i would be interested to know or was it fantasy
if any of the above it is brilliant anyways i commend you on this beautiful write congrats

Posted 2 Months Ago


DIVYA

2 Months Ago

I have a friend here. He’s a very strange kind of guy. A totally split persona, hateful lovable, a.. read more
Is that reason why women tend to like dangerous men? This is a fantastic read. An all out downhill tumble into the head of a woman's wants and then the last stanza kicks it off track and lets you know that what you were thinking is not what we were thinking. I love the firmness of the statements, they don't hint, they pour. Loved this!!!!

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Months Ago

There is something very compelling and vulnerable about a man who lives on the edge, is restless and.. read more
There is a throaty eroticism to this one....a love that is sweetened with lust and sensuality. He is the man you want....for any time and any reason. Wonderful, Divya. Lydi**

Posted 2 Months Ago


DIVYA

2 Months Ago

Indeed Lydi. When a woman loves, she loves with body and soul! Thank you so much for such an awesome.. read more
Powerful use of words and thoughts dear Divya.
"For better or worse
she seeks his heart
not for herself
but just to know where he bleeds"
The above lines. Are true for many. We believe we can teach hope and love. Most times, we can't. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Months Ago


DIVYA

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much for for sharing your precious thoughts on this poem sir. Indeed, most times we fai.. read more
I like this; there are some great images. For example,' the frost that thickly coats his breath', and 'the stygian mares'. I think my favorite though, is 'his battle-stained feet.'
Not what I would call beautiful, exactly, but powerful.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your precious time and for finding my words effective and powerful. It means a.. read more
angel

2 Months Ago

You are very welcome. I always enjoy readung your pieces.
The last line is a killer, the key to the entire poem. Great pacing and timing in this one. Well done.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Months Ago

Thank you so much for stopping by!
Very nice; extremely high quality writing.

There's a problem with the 8th line though. It doesn't make grammatical sense as it currently stands. If you were to say 'why he chase his..." you wouldn't sound right.

I think I'd go with "and why he chases his beasts" or something like that.

It's all pretty flawless besides that one line.

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

DIVYA

2 Months Ago

Hi David....
So nice to see you here. This will always be my all time favourite write for me... read more
David

2 Months Ago

It's always my pleasure.

(I think the new 8th line would read even better without "an.. read more
DIVYA

2 Months Ago

Yes, indeed. It does.... :)

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