Days with You

Who would ever hate to spend his/her day with a special person?

I remember that day when we first met

The nervous feeling that makes me sweat

You glanced at me and I gazed away

Leaving me conscious with no words to say

 

A grin from you was enough to me

Your so kind heart that some can’t see

I saw the deepest love in your shadow

A constant feeling that I merely follow

 

The simple “Hi!” that gives me a pleasure

Your warmest words that I will treasure

As your eye abruptly connects with mine

When I looked too reddish, it is a sign

 

Through the days I’ve been with you

Our best moments that I truly value

Here it is, filled with my passion

Because of this divine affection

Reviews

[Archia]

I loved how none of the rhyme seemd force or corny either.

[skigirl]

I loved it!!!!! I don't know if you noticed but I realized there was a double meaning. Well done! Can't wait to read more!!! :)

[Caitlin Dale]

aww.. you left me wonderstruck! every stanza perfectly describes the happiest days with someone you love. the indescribable feeling at that first sight, the exchange of smiles, simple conversations and unforgettable times with that person...
this bring a lot of memories.. :) and the way those simple words brought a lot of meaning is brilliant. the rhyming scheme is perfect, and every line is flawless.. :)
it feels wonderful reading this poem filled with emotions, tenderness and passion. truly a noteworthy write!! ^_^
♥♥♥

[Layla Anne Massaro]

Err. Why am I getting this sweet feeling while reading this? Ha ha! This poem contains a lot of sugar-coated words and yes, I love it. This made my day after experiencing bad events earlier. Excellent, as always, young poetess.

...Layla...

[Kim's Poems]

Aw this is so wwonderful and lovely!
Amazing write

[~ Stefanie ~]

I loved this! I love reading your work cause it always flows so smoothly :) I could keep reading forever. Anyway another fantastic piece penned by you!

[Tai]

Sweet write, the ending could have used a little bit of work in my opinion. Rhyme scheme was brilliant and simply, and thoughts from your mind flow through this easily. This was nicely penned, I enjoyed it.

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Such a sweet wonderful, lovely write.

[Amila Jay]

Sweet and sensual, a lovely poem:)

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This is such a sweet write. penned so lovely...xo