I Tried Enough

...When you've given your best yet you still think it wasn't good enough...

I  tried to be a sun to lighten up your entire day

I tried to be a heroine for you in a unique way

I tried to be a dream that can make you aim high

I tried to be a synthetic rose that will never die

 

I  tried to be a shadow watching you every moment

I tried to be a medicine when you seem not decent

I tried to be a chocolate that can remove your depression

I tried to be a fairy who can make you drink a love potion

 

I  tried everything to impress you with my ability

But it looks not sufficient to be your one and only

Someday, I’ll do better and I will come to reach you

You are a dream so high that will never come true

Reviews

[Legacy]

Thrinna Mae,

Currently missing those moments of things (this good) just popping in my head! ;)

To the eye, ‘tis pleasing
To the emotions, ‘tis giving
To the end, ‘tis moving

The wonder of it all is that the font walks right beside the flow in your words; I can nearly hear you thinking this aloud.

Most wonderfully done, especially as it just popped in your head, pure and sweet yet bitter and dissatisfied. (The emotion).

Allowing me to flashback to those days of hopeful love and excitement - ah, to be let down by love again (in these days). Time is slipping by; embrace the love despite its' deceit.

Thank you for sharing,

Legacy

P.S. Have you entered any of the contests within Poetic Infusion Society? If not, I believe this one belongs in Love.

[Michael West]

A heartfelt write....beautifully penned

[Break The Broken]

wow, that was really good i loved the last stanza! perfect! c:
I tried everything to impress you with my ability
But it looks not sufficient to be your one and only
Someday, I’ll do better and I will come to reach you
You are a dream so high that will never become true

[Emily Paige]

I love this it really touched me I'm always finding myself looking to please others first so i can really feel were you are coming great piece really good job
~emiy paige~

[jusmine]

some people are just so numb. by the way your poem is great.

[Kenneth S.]

Stellar. A teen poet with a mature eye.

[BloodyMary]

I loved this! You are really good at poetry and should do more in the future!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

True write, i love this a lot, and i love how you sort of related things "I tried..." i love the repetition too. Really nice.

[Cheng Yew,Chew]

i agree with Megan