I Tried Enough

...When you've given your best yet you still think it wasn't good enough...

I  tried to be a sun to lighten up your entire day

I tried to be a heroine for you in a unique way

I tried to be a dream that can make you aim high

I tried to be a synthetic rose that will never die

 

I  tried to be a shadow watching you every moment

I tried to be a medicine when you seem not decent

I tried to be a chocolate that can remove your depression

I tried to be a fairy who can make you drink a love potion

 

I  tried everything to impress you with my ability

But it looks not sufficient to be your one and only

Someday, I’ll do better and I will come to reach you

You are a dream so high that will never come true

Reviews

[Legacy]

Thrinna Mae,

Currently missing those moments of things (this good) just popping in my head! ;)

To the eye, ‘tis pleasing
To the emotions, ‘tis giving
To the end, ‘tis moving

The wonder of it all is that the font walks right beside the flow in your words; I can nearly hear you thinking this aloud.

Most wonderfully done, especially as it just popped in your head, pure and sweet yet bitter and dissatisfied. (The emotion).

Allowing me to flashback to those days of hopeful love and excitement - ah, to be let down by love again (in these days). Time is slipping by; embrace the love despite its' deceit.

Thank you for sharing,

Legacy

P.S. Have you entered any of the contests within Poetic Infusion Society? If not, I believe this one belongs in Love.

[Ms.Bri]

..Amazing! That was well written and flows so good. I Look forward to reading more of your work. Keep writing

[Tenebrousoul]

Great job! I loved the rhythm this flows with. :D

[ChaoticSoul]

This is really beautiful- the words, the style, the structure. All wonderful. And it really relates to something that is universal. That desire to impress someone by bringing out all our best qualities in order to capture our heart's desire. You have really illustrated the effort, hope, and frustration that infatuation can bring. Lovely writing!

[Melinda Weber]

Amazing..... i adore this piece :)

[Commanda Panda]

I envy guys who have girls falling at their feet ready to do anything for them even when they don't care. They also ruin any chance a decent guy has with a good woman.

[Swapz747]

Its mind shivering piece
. just splendid.. A Great write :-)

[ColourMyLife]

this almost made me cry this is so true! love it!

[Jed Sabffle]

Among your writings, this is my favorite.. :).. A very well-written poem. :)

[Carly Bre-Ann]

Really creative metaphors !

[Doctor Why]

You are a very good writer, if I must say. This has a very well-crafted flow to it that wanders through the reader's ears and leaves a good emount of emotion remaining. Good job, mate!