I Tried Enough

...When you've given your best yet you still think it wasn't good enough...

I  tried to be a sun to lighten up your entire day

I tried to be a heroine for you in a unique way

I tried to be a dream that can make you aim high

I tried to be a synthetic rose that will never die

 

I  tried to be a shadow watching you every moment

I tried to be a medicine when you seem not decent

I tried to be a chocolate that can remove your depression

I tried to be a fairy who can make you drink a love potion

 

I  tried everything to impress you with my ability

But it looks not sufficient to be your one and only

Someday, I’ll do better and I will come to reach you

You are a dream so high that will never come true

Reviews

[Legacy]

Thrinna Mae,

Currently missing those moments of things (this good) just popping in my head! ;)

To the eye, ‘tis pleasing
To the emotions, ‘tis giving
To the end, ‘tis moving

The wonder of it all is that the font walks right beside the flow in your words; I can nearly hear you thinking this aloud.

Most wonderfully done, especially as it just popped in your head, pure and sweet yet bitter and dissatisfied. (The emotion).

Allowing me to flashback to those days of hopeful love and excitement - ah, to be let down by love again (in these days). Time is slipping by; embrace the love despite its' deceit.

Thank you for sharing,

Legacy

P.S. Have you entered any of the contests within Poetic Infusion Society? If not, I believe this one belongs in Love.

[dan nacario]

AWESOME!!!

[Layla Anne Massaro]

It looks like you did you best efforts here yet that person still cannot appreciate it. Damn that guy. I like this poem. It happens that sometimes even though we give all we have for it, we can't still get what we want. Excellent poem.

...Layla...

[Christina May Shanaberg]

It is sad when people try so hard in a relationship that they cease to be themselves. My philosophy is "I am me. Love me or leave me, because I'm not changin'!"

A very well penned poem!!

[Mark]

what a nice write. clever and catchy and enjoyable to read.

[Summer'sBreeze]

that was really beautiful

[~*Moody Thursday*~]

Very cool. I love the topic. I would change the syllables to let the poem flow more smoothly, but other than that, great work!

[Jake Staffeld]

This exact thing actually happened to me not four hours ago. It sucks to have that kinda thing thrown in your face :( You've taken away my ability to do constructive criticism...

[Leslie Philibert]

A great poem that works well because it is honest,My English teacher said to me many years ago....make it true,make it new,make it you.That`s what you did.Well done.

[Robbie]

I like the format displayed here. The metaphorical phrases were cleverly written. Nice write!

[Irfan Bashir Shah]

4th line of 1st stanza is very different.
In my opinion you will get better and better if you stick that way.