Shattered Pieces

Why do they call it heartbreak when it feels like your entire body is broken?

 Open my mind and you’ll see your shadow

Leave me for once in a place so hollow

Give me the courage to forget you now

You’ll please me no more by taking a vow

 

Love me for 'never' like we’ve been nothing

Trash me like filth and leave me crying

Someday you’ll realize that you were wrong

And once again listen to our favorite song

 

These tears are flowing because of my pain

I hate you so much for you are so vain

My soul will never accept such defeat

Once again I’ll rise from the deepest pit

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Last lines is the key to this poem.
"My soul will never accept such defeat
Once again I’ll rise from the deepest pit"
Pain can overtake us. Sometime we need to move on and leave the trash behind. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Boldpen]

Excellent poem. Loved it. This poem showed kind of BHS... Broken Heart's Strength.
Excellent use of expressions and words. You will find it funny, but I myself wrote some thing very much like that. But yours had the effect over reader that mine can't.
Great work indeed.

[victoria]

very strong but beautiful and terrifyingly sad, there is also some courage i felt, but verygood !

[K.C. Zbryk]

The ending line speaks so much truth, we must always rise up. Each experience good or bad is something to learn from. The resilliance shown in this is fantastic. This is an amazing addition to your collection

[paradise]

I love this been in hat position before Really liked it great ink

[MetBySunlight]

I like this! Well done (:

[Michael Mwachofi]

After the downslope of feeling and endless hurt i liked how you shone the "light at the end of the tunnel" vibe at the end of the piece :D

"Love me for 'never' like we’ve been nothing
Trash me like filth and leave me crying"

There's a song i like that coincides with this piece--> it has a line with "You don't know what you got till it's gone..." Unfortunately that is human nature...when we want something we go after it with passion and with full dedication...then after we get it- it's appeal loses lustre in our eyes and then we can mistreat it again...but when we'll come to appreciate it's usefulness is when we lose it again...then and only when will we truly regret any wrong we caused it...

Wonderfully done Thrinna :D

~M.Babu~

[HighSchoolAdventurer]

i realy like this goood job :)

[Groovy]

So skillfully expressed.

[Michelle]

Amazing. :]

[I Am Svetlana]

People soon regret certain actions they've done or past things that they have said...we all just live in the heat of the moment, but soon realize and miss what we once had because it's gone. Living in the moment can make or break you down to your last vein. Your words are interesting and they are amazing. You make good lines, I can see each line in my mind as I read them. They flow together and tell a good story or message.