The Unreachable Star

A star carries so many wishes that sometimes few of them fall apart.

As the brightest star calls out your name

And destiny begins to create such game

Playing with my heart to reach out for you

Gazing at the skies feeling so much blue

 

Dreaming of you each night to be with me

Lifting up my hands praying wholeheartedly

Crossing my fingers wishing for once more

As I patiently wait to find an open door

 

When I closed my eyes your vision appears

To remind me I’ve loved you for myriad years

All I’ve ever wished was to be in your life

Loving you each day seems to be so rife

You might be unreachable like a radiant star

A moment of grasping you from a space afar

Will I ever have the chance of reaching you?

Or will this dream I’ve created not come true?

Reviews

[Michael Mwachofi]

The flow in this was just gushing and i truly commend you for the effort you must have put into it to achieve that effect!

Such polished words, matured by experience, haunted by doubt but forged through time...perfectly toned piece. You get a 100% from me dear Thrinna..

Well done!!! :D

"As the brightest star calls out your name
And destiny begins to create such game
Playing with my heart to reach out for you
Gazing at the skies feeling so much blue
Dreaming of you each night to be with me
Lifting up my hands praying wholeheartedly
Crossing my fingers wishing for once more
As I patiently wait to find an open door"

Felt every word here!! Wonderful stuff!
~M.Babu~

[lovejulez03]

I like the flow of this piece and it was well written and definitely easy to relate to , so thank you :)

[Mary]

this is a wonderful poem! I love the rhyme, and rhythm, and the first few lines really set the tone of the whole poem. Seeing that first star, making that wish of wishes, destiny toying with your heart. good write!

[Ayanda Mteto]

we dream dream with hope to true, this such a beatiful poem full of imagination and readable ease :-)

[MoriartyMesa]

Stars, and more from what I felt from this moving piece, so many visuals come to mind, like taking acid and a rocket ship ride.

[$êlvån]

hats off:-):-)i would write a couple of page full of appreciation 4 it but ryt now mood off:)its a gr8 poem:)loved it..

[Pax]

for me 'if you like somebody you perceived them as stars'
i really like your style in the first letters in each stanza...
very good work my friend

[Diwakar - "The Warrior ..]

Definitely you can reach me...give me a call ........lolzzzzzzzzzzzzz...just kidding.........................very nice poem for the one you love .... love it :-)

[SecretShadow]

rather well said.

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I really enjoyed the flow and rhyme scheme in this write.
This is very nicely written.

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

Oh, I see. They're just sort of illumination letters. I had acrostic poems in mind. The stars are so...beautiful.