Westenra's Lament

This is a kyrielle poem

Sleeping, I'm dreaming, hoping for you.
I rise in the dusk and see you come through
my window. So beautiful, in you I delight
like a lover, your kisses, like a viper, your bite.

The next day I'm listless, for you I am waiting.
Pining alone, at my window complaining,
of how I can't see you in more than twilight.
Like a lover, your kisses, like a viper, your bite.

Now in darkness I wake, all daylight I shun.
Midnight is noontime, the moonlight my sun.
You took me in love, yet you gave me your plight,
like a lover, your kisses, like a viper, your bite.

Do not forget me so quickly, my sweet,
and my racing breath as my heart skipped a beat.
You loved me so fully and left in the night.
Now, as a lover I'll kiss, as a viper, I'll bite.

Reviews

[vamplit]

This is a great poem and exactly the type of poem I was looking for in this competition. The repeat of the last line in every stanza really pull this poem together. This poem has gone straight on to the finalist list. Amazing piece of romantic poetry.

[bluessadmood]

God my friend so very enhanced romance,emotions too strong like it will burst
Such love could not be tolerated on earth,its like it belongs to some other beings
or another planet,such love,such unearthly love..
I dream of you,I rise in dusk and see you come,so beautiful you are and I delight
In you like a lover,next day I lose my strength ,sit at my window and complain
In darkness I awake,all sunlight i shun,midnight is my day,moonlight is my sun
Dont forget me quick my sweet,my breath races and my heart skips a beat
You loved me so but left me in the night,now I ll kiss as a lover,bite as a viper
Oh what loveliness,this is really so nice
lovely write..

[Helena]

What a superb write. I loved this form.....well done! ~ Helena