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That Word I Love To Hear


A Poem by Tina Castle

 

 

 

Love is the word that rolls right off your tongue

and whispers so softly into my ears.

I hear you saying it as we sleep, as we eat,

and as he creeps.

That monster deep inside you

that cannot be subdued.

When he comes out I try not to fear

as your eyes turn red

not with love, but with rage that

no one can control.

As you kiss the purple bruises

on my arms, on my legs, on my back

and on my face I can still hear it.

That word you say so much

is chanted through the night

as I cry silently telling myself

that this is ok.

This is love.

That word I love to hear.


© 2009 Tina Castle
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This poem is short, and yet the message of the abuse still flows across in a beautifully abstract way. At least, that's what I'm getting from this.

Abuse is a terrible thing, and yet it seems like so many people can't recognise it and don't do anything about it but bear it. However, I understand how charm can keep anyone with someone.

I definitely like the idea of the monster... indeed, rage can be like one, most definitely. One thing I'd watch for is repeating words too close together, unless it's meant to make the word itself more prominent. In this case it was the word control, and it threw me off a little as I was reading. Repeating words can be a real jerk when it comes to poems. [I'm always watching myself for it.]

Good work though. Well done poem with a fairly nice flow, decent diction and a good idea. Bitter sweet.

Posted 5 Months Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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