That Word I Love To Hear

 

 

 

Love is the word that rolls right off your tongue

and whispers so softly into my ears.

I hear you saying it as we sleep, as we eat,

and as he creeps.

That monster deep inside you

that cannot be subdued.

When he comes out I try not to fear

as your eyes turn red

not with love, but with rage that

no one can control.

As you kiss the purple bruises

on my arms, on my legs, on my back

and on my face I can still hear it.

That word you say so much

is chanted through the night

as I cry silently telling myself

that this is ok.

This is love.

That word I love to hear.

Reviews

[Euphoric Sin]

This poem is short, and yet the message of the abuse still flows across in a beautifully abstract way. At least, that's what I'm getting from this.

Abuse is a terrible thing, and yet it seems like so many people can't recognise it and don't do anything about it but bear it. However, I understand how charm can keep anyone with someone.

I definitely like the idea of the monster... indeed, rage can be like one, most definitely. One thing I'd watch for is repeating words too close together, unless it's meant to make the word itself more prominent. In this case it was the word control, and it threw me off a little as I was reading. Repeating words can be a real jerk when it comes to poems. [I'm always watching myself for it.]

Good work though. Well done poem with a fairly nice flow, decent diction and a good idea. Bitter sweet.

[Sami Khalil]

A very good one...Bravo....................

[Blakprinze (Vincent J.)]

You write so beautifully about pain. I hope it is not from your own. Good write though.

[Tina Kline]

Your poem seems beautiful yet is so tragic.
Hurting someone then telling them you love them.
I wanted to cry for her who is speaking from this
poem!

Even so, the poem is wonderful, very well written
and speaks the truth so strongly!

[Alz Alz]

My absolute favorite poem... Beautiful :)

[Chaos Stone]

fabulous job
i hope its not written from experience
euphric sin said that the word control was repeated, did you remedy this with the word subdued?
if so, great job, because even the monster cant subdue his rage
i really liked this, disturbing yet strangely sweet write
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[Ama May Cooper]

A very very strange way of portrayng such a serous and panful message.
The poem is shorter than the words, almost as if the feeling lasts for longer then the poem itself a wondefully written piece.
Abuse is far from a funny thing and you portray the pain and the confusion nad belife that the woman/men who are taken in by it belive they deserve it is alkmost sickly wondefully written.