Something Lethal This Way Comes

"Horror"

Gleaming red eyes
gazing at me
from beneath rippling grey fur

Fangs glisten
hungry panting echoes
I can only feel fear

Running isn't an option
as the creature approaches
something lethal this way comes

and I know without doubt
I am dinner
for there is no escape for me

Reviews

[Jack Reaper]

makes me think of being cornered by a hungry wolf, which would be terrifying. im not sure if you were going for some other creature or not, and it might be because i just read your wolf lune haiku. in any case, knowing your own demise is imminent is truely horrifying. very nicely done.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks!!

[Craig2591]

Wow! One of your scariest. I like the line, 'Running isn't an option'. There's a finality to that.

I both read 'Something Wicked this Way Comes' and watched the film. I liked the film better. Ray Bradbury uses waaaaaay too much metaphor.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks very much.

[Sean M. Addams]

very creepy like the detail in this too nice job

[Tina Kline]

Thanks a lot!!

[Deeper La'jik]

Highly imaginative and haunting. The impression of fear and horror was also kicked up by your use of the senses, I was virtually able to step into your perceptual world and experience that moment. I shelved this one :)

[lee von cleef]

I am dinner, what a statement.

[Coyote Song]

A very sinister poem, not loud and bold but sinister and lethal just the same. It's like a sneak attack. Powerfully done.

[quinfinn]

"by the pricking of my thumbs" well, i have to say this was an engaging read ...very well done and quite scary except the phrase "hungry pants" i thought of blue jeans which had not eaten....therefore hungry...don't know why, just my sick sense of humor i suppose. very good write!

[Tina Kline]

Yes, I can see why you'd think of blue jeans when reading the phrase hungry pants. I didn't think of that. I do think that will need some fixing. Thanks very much.

[quinfinn]

i don't mean to sound critical, but, i have a very weird sense of humor and the words "hungry pants" sound like a cheap joke to me.....you know, porno titles and such

[quinfinn]

perhaps "hungrily panting" would be a fix?

[Tina Kline]

Yes, I see where your coming from!!! And I do agree!

[Tina Kline]

:)

[quinfinn]

;)

[Tina Kline]

Thanks for your helpful suggestion!

[Zachary_James]

Fantastic read, short but i love this, gave me chills.

[Tina Kline]

Thank you!

[larryb]

Nice write...sends chills thru you

[Tina Kline]

Thank you!

[Black Cat Fever]

This is rather sinister. Very hair raising!