Long Sleeves

Long Sleeves

A Poem by WordlessFacade

You would always smile
and say, "I'm fine"
But, you wore long sleeves 
all the time.

I knew but you didn't 
but what could I say?
"Hey I saw your scars,
so just quit okay?"

Knowing me 
I couldn't do anything
Cause I know 
you'd think I'll start telling

And even if you didn't 
I would be afraid 
that you would be mad 
and nothing would be okay

But look at me
I can't tell you to quit
because I'm nothing more
than a hypocrite

Because I had a secret 
that you never knew
that I hid my arms 
with long sleeves too.

© 2014 WordlessFacade


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very powerful , I can understand what you mean here
I love your writing

Posted 7 Years Ago


WordlessFacade

7 Years Ago

I'm glad you like it. I like your works as well! :D
I love the sense of vulnerability, making it sound that the victim at the start had more power than you did. And yes, it is scary to tell the victim of self-harm to stop, you never know what emotions will come pouring out at you! The twist in the end though... great but such a sad ending, didn't expect that from this poem! But it still flowed, and it did make sense, so congratulations! Keep writing, love your poems.

Posted 9 Years Ago


WordlessFacade

9 Years Ago

Thanks! :) I will continue writing. I'm glad you like them! I really like yours too!^-^
1Disawsum

9 Years Ago

aaw thanks! :D
Wow, this is devastating. I just wrote a poem about Teens Of This Generation and this fits in well with the first stanza. I believe you reviewed that poem too. Some people have reasons to cut themselves, while others do it for whatever I guess. The people that have legit reasons to cut themselves I really feel sorry for. I hate that they must do that. Writing and drawing is what helps take things off of my mind. I am the type of person to feel sorry for a person if the reason is needed. Some people cut themselves because of someone breaking up with them; while there life is going perfect. There is plenty fish in the sea. I tend to rant over this topic a lot. It is just people think that their life is so horrible, when in reality there are a lot of people worse off in the world. There are people that do not know where their next meal is coming from, their parents are off somewhere, they witnessed one of their family members being killed, or they have been diagnosed with a deathly disease. Yet, those people try their best to stay strong. I encourage that for every cutter I have ever come in contact with:STAY STRONG. This poem is overall well-written. I like the concept of the title and the message. In the end, you wanted your friend to tell you the truth even though you already knew. That is what friends are for; to lean upon when our lives are giving us troubles.

Keep writing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


WordlessFacade

9 Years Ago

Thanks and I know what you mean =)
Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect

9 Years Ago

You are welcome! :)
Hmm. I can relate to this. I have a friend who used to cut, but he never told anyone...I found out via friend to friend. We all hide some things, with long sleeves. Brilliant. :P

Posted 9 Years Ago


WordlessFacade

9 Years Ago

Thanks! and same here. :)
I can relate to this, you wrote it well :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


WordlessFacade

9 Years Ago

thank you =)
Addiction is one of our major social problems: Your poem inspired me to write this tiny gift poem for you to keep as your own:

Addicted

Hide your scars with wiles:
camouflaging smiles,
checkered long sleeve styles,
shady low profiles.

Posted 9 Years Ago


WordlessFacade

9 Years Ago

Thank you, and I like the poem :)
Aethereal

9 Years Ago

You're welcome! Your poem got its message across, and so I tried to express part of the same message.. read more
Good job with this one. The meter is not perfect, but it doesn't need to be in today's poetry. The flow and rhyming sequence are good and it reads well out loud. You do a good job of bringing the story full circle (which I like). And you bring out the true feelings of shame on a current topic and psychological disorder. You can be proud of this one, it's good.

Posted 9 Years Ago


WordlessFacade

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)

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Added on May 13, 2014
Last Updated on May 13, 2014
Tags: long, sleeves, cutting, sad, secrets, arms

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Hey, I'm Jazz, and I'm someone that has a passion for writing poetry. :D I honestly have been on hiatus for a while, trying to inspire myself once more, but I hope to start posting again! I hope you.. more..

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