I'm just a cookie

I'm just a cookie

A Story by Tomoe Tellez
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Mallow’s tiny world is inhabited by cookies instead of humans. It’s a world like ours where even the sweetest people can be corrupted.

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-Would life ever be sweet again?- I wondered. Sweet as rice crispies covered in chocolate and colorful sprinkles.

Papa Milano used to call mother that, his sweet Crispy, even though she is a butter cookie. He was simple too, but in the inside he was sweet and kind. But papa isn´t here anymore. So mother cries almost every day, and well, everyone knows what happens when a cookie gets wet. She is falling apart literally, crump by crump. I fear she might end up disappearing one day. Already there´s a crack that goes from the right of her forehead to her nose bridge. It’s slowly cracking open like a cracker. 

By the way, I’m Mallow. And yes, I am half cookie and half marshmallow. Living in the Pecan lands isn’t easy. Nothing is what it seems. Not all the persons that walk the streets of this town are actual cookies. They just pretend to be and we let them.

My papa isn’t dead if you were wondering. He just… he had to leave to the Icing land. Not because he wanted, or at least that´s what he told us. The world has turned sour rather than sweeter as I grow up. I was incredulous to believe that most of the cookies in this town are made with salt. You know, the rocky crystals that make you scrunch up your whole face when tasting just a small portion. Life has led me to believe less in what my sprinkled eyes can see.

He wants us to go with him somewhere around the time sugar cookies start glazing their faces with spider webs and jack-o lanterns.

Although papa writes in his letters that the Icing lands aren’t as full of icing anymore, in my opinion it will be a better home than here. 

Cookies live in fear here. There´s no freedom or peace. If you go out to the park or the grocery store, you have to be careful not to look "them" in the eye. I'm talking about the brownies. If this text were to end up in their hands, they would surely turn me over to the Tasters, or even worst, I could end up being cracked into pieces they would pack in a tiny box and send it to my mother! That´s what happened to one of our neighbor’s son.

So please, whoever gets this message, don't share it with anyone. Just keep it. 

My father had to leave the town because of them. They're always thirsty for cookie filling and were planning on breaking him to pieces themselves.

Why? I don't know. My father has always been a good cookie. Why would anyone want to break him?

Mother says it's just the way they work (the brownies). The cruel reality is that the Donut Officers are with them, and my father wasn't able to ask for their help.

And you want to know what's even more horrible about this. Sometime ago, before my father left, a cookie wafer who was tired of the donuts had gathered a group with all sort of cookies. He had the intention of taking down the Tasters. He wanted a revolution. 

But it never came. The wafer was killed shortly after the brownies let him think he had won one stunt. They offered more flour to the rest of the group, so those cookies are too working with them. 

Sadly most of the Pecan town doesn't know this. The cookies that live here think that those wafers and s´mores that stand at each corner out in the streets are here to defend us.

I have two little brothers, Chunk and Chip. I don't wish for them to grow up here, in the middle of a battlefield filled with crumbs and jam filling that covers the streets.

The Icing lands might not be our homeland, but at least there the Tasters keep themselves at bay. Yet this doesn't make mother any less mournful about leaving the land in which she was baked. I understand that, but not why everyone wants to stay here without making a change. 

Leaving will not be easy either. My little family and I scheme every day. We need to be ready if we want to outsmart the Tasters so they can let us go to meet with papa. There are two ways we can go to the Icing lands. One is with a special permission and the other way is sneaking by, disguising ourselves with royal icing.

Since mother is an honest cookie we will try out the first way. I really hope in the name of the baker that made us that we get that permission.

However in the end I'm just a cookie. Meanwhile, there´s nothing I can do but wait. I can´t protect my family from "them" or anything at all. 

I can just hope and keep wondering if life will ever be sweet again.

AlondraTellez©

© 2016 Tomoe Tellez


Author's Note

Tomoe Tellez
This is the first time I publish my writing. English is my second language. Please be honest with me. Any comments will be welcome.

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This was a fantastic article to read. It definitely felt real despite being obviously not. Which is a talent not everyone has. Don't put down that pencil/pen/keyboard. You have a real knack for writing and I would encourage more of it. Also you are required by the brownies to continue this story, or else. We all want to know what happens next when a sugary world is covered in salt.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

2 Years Ago

Well, I have a very good friend in here who has helped me a lot to grow as a writer but they're a li.. read more
AustinBG

2 Years Ago

Ah, I see. Unfortunately I'm still just learning, so I wouldn't be if much use there.
Tomoe Tellez

2 Years Ago

Hopefully, one day I'll get back to this one.




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This was a fantastic article to read. It definitely felt real despite being obviously not. Which is a talent not everyone has. Don't put down that pencil/pen/keyboard. You have a real knack for writing and I would encourage more of it. Also you are required by the brownies to continue this story, or else. We all want to know what happens next when a sugary world is covered in salt.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

2 Years Ago

Well, I have a very good friend in here who has helped me a lot to grow as a writer but they're a li.. read more
AustinBG

2 Years Ago

Ah, I see. Unfortunately I'm still just learning, so I wouldn't be if much use there.
Tomoe Tellez

2 Years Ago

Hopefully, one day I'll get back to this one.

I really enjoyed your humor in this write Alondra :) I love the way you tell the story in a serious tone, yet it's creatively funny since we understand the topic. I enjoyed it very much :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

2 Years Ago

Thanks a lot AaronFreitas, I am sorry I had not seen this comment before so I did not answer sooner,.. read more
Hahahahah, God, I thoroughly enjoyed it. Touching dark topics with the light of humour, a talent indeed. I would suggest getting someone to proof read and help with the editing. Polish it up. A book I would love to read if ever you choose to complete it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

3 Years Ago

Ha, :D thanks! If I ever did a book it would be short, but there is missing part, like I've told som.. read more
Eliot Knight

3 Years Ago

Do send a read request when you do. Your most welcome!
Hahah! i loved it! Veryyyyy funnny. It also helps that I love cookies. This is very witty. I like!


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

3 Years Ago

Hey, thanks a lot! Sorry, I just saw the review. I posted this a long time ago. I'm curious as to ho.. read more
If this is the first u have published...m pretty sure there's gonna be a lot more to come..because what I see in your work and thoughts is theatricality which most people lack. I wish u all the best and I must say u really have the endeavouring stint of getting that extra grace to make things interesting..but don't I feel u loose the hold of your vision at breaks. Rest good job. Keep writing and if u go through my writings please do review them I will be honoured

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

3 Years Ago

I have published more :). If you would like to read more I have some small poems, short stories and .. read more
Basit Majeed

3 Years Ago

Ua welcome
Love this! Fresh, original writing. "well, everyone knows what happens when a cookie gets wet." - was a Disney moment right there! Do not stop writing.

Ps: If you get a chance, please review my book. I definitely want your opinion on it.
PPs: I definitely want anyones opinion on it :D

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

3 Years Ago

Wow! Thank you very much, I'm glad that you think so and that you love it! :)
I will definite.. read more
Being honest, i loved it :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

3 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Are you translating these yourself, or using a site online? Great job! "My father has always been a good cookie. Nobody could ever break him." Nice, I like it. I can feel your characters right from the beginning. Getting readers to do that for me has always been my weakness, so I commend you. I am actually trying to learn Spanish right now for my third language, so you can send me Spanish version if you ever want to...haha. If you could maybe go over Chapter 3 and 4 of my "Hornan Droverson," I would really appreciate that! Your story is easy to read and simple, yet very enjoyable. I like how you used "I wonder if life will ever be sweet again," to get this chapter started! It was a great read for me, thank you for sharing!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

3 Years Ago

I will read them, and the others. Thanks a lot for your words. This piece of writing is not in spani.. read more
Stars and Whales

3 Years Ago

I speak some Russian.
Tomoe Tellez

3 Years Ago

That's so cool! :0
This is so clever, a very enjoyable read. I loved it!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomoe Tellez

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much for reading.

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