The effect of today’s sins

This is a poem I wrote for a villain of my novel "The written forgotten".

In the world of the living

Demons cannot win

In this heart full of hate

Love has arrived too late

For in my head rules the rage

That is caused by this new age

Author's Note

What do you think of after reading this poem?

Reviews

[E G TEN]

Hello Alondra, I have read somewhere that the best way to
Enhance your characters, are to write something About
them outside of the story. I've done it as well, I believe
It works. You've done it very well in this piece, very cool.
Thanks for the send'

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thank you very much for reading it! :D This isn't the only piece I've done, I hope to upload more in the future, but for now they would be full of spoilers for my novel.

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and true words my poet friend.
"For in my head rules the rage
That is caused by this new age"
In a world control by hate, war and separation. New age seem very scary. Thank you for sharing the powerful words.
Coyote

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thanks a lot to you for reading this! I'm glad you think this way.

[Coyote Poetry]

I do and you are welcome.

[Insight "MH"]

Traffic jams, and not being able to breath clean air.

Insight.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Wow! That's a different perspective than what I thought I would receive as an answer and actually it's something I thought about while writing this poem. Thanks for reading!

[Insight "MH"]

You are very welcome.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

I think of waking up, and knowing I'm still living in the same old, cruel, bloody, hateful world i was born in. and who are all those who go against the injustice? well, outcasts. like me.

anyway, found a song that would go with this piece here's the link : https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=SBjQ9tuuTJQ&itct=CBkQpDAYBCITCPah-KziiskCFVacHAodd5wIxDIHcmVsYXRlZEifrI7V5ojx39MB&client=mv-google&gl=RS&hl=hu

100 points my friend, no doubts about it.

[Tomoe Tellez]

I heard the song, it was amazing, thanks for sharing. And thanks a lot for the review, it means a lot to me that you liked it.

[Dani The Unreviewed]

You are always welcome :D

[alifeacoustic]

I can picture this as being used as a voiceover to describe an upcoming show on TV, or a DVD trailer, with some husky voices "Candymanesque" type dude doing the talking. I like the rage of the new age, it is left open for the readers own critique of what enrages them about modern living. (where do I start? technology replacing humans in the workplace, everything made to break and be replaced, Oh I haven't had enough coffee yet, but the list is endless)
I also like the red for demons, hate and rage, and the blue for living, love and new age. It depicts the mind as seeing these words as cold, which might explain the rage within.
Superbly done Sally. Me likey.

[alifeacoustic]

Oops, sorry Alondra. I just realised that this was a read request sent by Sally and not written by her.

[Tomoe Tellez]

Ja, ja, ja, XD! Don't worry, and thanks a lot for your words, they really made me smile in a giddy way.

[alifeacoustic]

You're welcome :)

[Sally Hope]

Firstly, I love the fact that you wrote 'LOVE" in blue, in place of the traditional red. You used red for "rage", "demons", "hate", instead. That's what I call unique, right there. And, as for the poem, I simply love it; all of it. Case closed.
PS: After reading this, I immediately thought of Damon Salvatore - a character from the television series "The Vampire Diaries".

[Tomoe Tellez]

Thank you! :D I generally don't like it that both rage and love are represented with the same color, I think love should be a more suave and sweet color. I'm very glad that you loved it thanks for reading!