unwelcome

unwelcome

A Poem by Tony Jordan
"

Farts in spacesuits ...yeah, as welcome as that

"


you just appear like 
toast sweat sogging my warm bread 
from the underneath

© 2017 Tony Jordan



Author's Note

Tony Jordan
venting in senryu

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Haha Tony...this is really one creative senryu. I love reading haikus and senryu poems so this one came as a surprise for me.
You described a natural process very smoothly and It surely didn't sound disgusting ;-)
I had a good laugh reading this !
Keep experimenting and keep writing.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Gorthi I appreciate your visit. I like senryus but I don't think they like me.
I will keep .. read more



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Yeowee, I think someone needs to keep their distance! Maybe garlic would repel them?

Posted 9 Months Ago


hmm. that certainly is unwelcome. just be glad it didn't turn into a water bed. a good analogy. nice.

Posted 10 Months Ago


I've read through your poetry, and I love the fact that you can write a few words, and can be as simple as the one above, and you can write more complex stuff. I like the poem for/about Lennon, and your sexual poems truly depict the fire, the sparkle between women and men :)

Posted 10 Months Ago


Love it!! Nothing like a bit of venting in senryu. :))

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Its very naughty. Senryus and haikus should be kept for the beauty and idiosyncracies of Life...lol .. read more
hahaha gosh! this surely got me "eewww". A very disgusting way of letting the person know that they are an unwelcome sight lol.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

It was this or scream. I haven't screamed in a while. Lol
Thank you again Atiba. I appreciat.. read more
Venting eh?
It sucks when you can't open a window to let the steam out...

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

No me neither. Psst... between me and you I thought it was higher.

Pepper

11 Months Ago

If it weren't for you it might be.
Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Oh you...
*shuffling feet together*
Shucks ma'am...
Wow, now THAT is descriptive for sure! Certainly a unique senryu! Lydi**

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Not the best use of this noble form but ...but...I have no defence lol
Thank you for gracing .. read more
"Toast sweat"? That sounds disgusting! 😛
Seems to me as if you were trying to prove a person rotten 😂😂😂
This made me laugh ☺

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

I think toast sweat has turned out to be one thing that is universally repugnant but has until now w.. read more
Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Oooh where are my manners - thank you YumnaKay !!
Always a pleasure to see you.
Dr. YumnaKay

11 Months Ago

Haha yeah I really need to get my laughs back.. They seem to have disappeared..
You are welco.. read more
Haha Tony...this is really one creative senryu. I love reading haikus and senryu poems so this one came as a surprise for me.
You described a natural process very smoothly and It surely didn't sound disgusting ;-)
I had a good laugh reading this !
Keep experimenting and keep writing.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Gorthi I appreciate your visit. I like senryus but I don't think they like me.
I will keep .. read more
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Just Yuck! haha...TJ this was an unpleasant delight...I guess I won't be having toast this morning.
Starz x

Posted 11 Months Ago


Gee

11 Months Ago

Have a good evening
Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Break a pencil Starzy.

Hey Gee what ever happened to the Polish girl Ivana Rubbertit.. read more
Gee

11 Months Ago

Oh her, she married the son of an illegitimate llama farmer in Gdansk...never even got an invite. Ha.. read more

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