unwelcome

Farts in spacesuits ...yeah, as welcome as that

you just appear like 

toast sweat sogging my warm bread 

from the underneath

Author's Note

venting in senryu

Reviews

[Manu]

Haha Tony...this is really one creative senryu. I love reading haikus and senryu poems so this one came as a surprise for me.
You described a natural process very smoothly and It surely didn't sound disgusting ;-)
I had a good laugh reading this !
Keep experimenting and keep writing.

[Tony Jordan]

Gorthi I appreciate your visit. I like senryus but I don't think they like me.
I will keep trying though - thank you very much for encouraging me!

[Samuel Dickens]

Yeowee, I think someone needs to keep their distance! Maybe garlic would repel them?

[Pete]

hmm. that certainly is unwelcome. just be glad it didn't turn into a water bed. a good analogy. nice.

[Kate]

I've read through your poetry, and I love the fact that you can write a few words, and can be as simple as the one above, and you can write more complex stuff. I like the poem for/about Lennon, and your sexual poems truly depict the fire, the sparkle between women and men :)

[GreenShoes]

Love it!! Nothing like a bit of venting in senryu. :))

[Tony Jordan]

Its very naughty. Senryus and haikus should be kept for the beauty and idiosyncracies of Life...lol
- yeah Im a hypocrite lol.
Thank you opendoor34 !!
:)

[The dark story]

hahaha gosh! this surely got me "eewww". A very disgusting way of letting the person know that they are an unwelcome sight lol.

[Tony Jordan]

It was this or scream. I haven't screamed in a while. Lol
Thank you again Atiba. I appreciate your thoughts.

[...]

Venting eh?
It sucks when you can't open a window to let the steam out...

[Tony Jordan]

I never thought of that. See, that's why we men have made such a hames of things. The answer is always right in front of us and we still can't see it.

[...]

Yeah, men are dumb.
(I'm joking!!)

[Tony Jordan]

Oops my manners again.
Thank you Pepper for reciprocating.
Call again. Bring crumpets.

[Tony Jordan]

I can verify that 199.9% of the guys I know are dumb.

[...]

Of course. I would be delighted.

[...]

Lol! That's a pretty high %. And yet I'm not surprised...

[Tony Jordan]

No me neither. Psst... between me and you I thought it was higher.

[...]

If it weren't for you it might be.

[Tony Jordan]

Oh you...
*shuffling feet together*
Shucks ma'am...

[Lydia Shutter]

Wow, now THAT is descriptive for sure! Certainly a unique senryu! Lydi**

[Tony Jordan]

Not the best use of this noble form but ...but...I have no defence lol
Thank you for gracing my pages with your beauty and words Lydia
x

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"Toast sweat"? That sounds disgusting! 😛
Seems to me as if you were trying to prove a person rotten 😂😂😂
This made me laugh ☺

[Tony Jordan]

I think toast sweat has turned out to be one thing that is universally repugnant but has until now went under the radar lol.
Yes the subject of this turned out to be quite rotten indeed. Glad you got a chuckle. I think you could do with one of late (hugs)

[Tony Jordan]

Oooh where are my manners - thank you YumnaKay !!
Always a pleasure to see you.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Haha yeah I really need to get my laughs back.. They seem to have disappeared..
You are welcome ☺

[...]

Just Yuck! haha...TJ this was an unpleasant delight...I guess I won't be having toast this morning.
Starz x

[Tony Jordan]

My cousin dunks his toast in his tea. It's... ugggh.
God forbid I'd put ya off toast Starzy.
It's one of the five a day.
Along with tea, coffee, sugar puffs, cake and Beta blockers.
Have a great day my friend.
X

[...]

Aww TJ...you give me all the good feels with that wonderful imagery...so thoughtful x

[Tony Jordan]

Hahah
Sarcasm they name is Anastasia
Lol

[Gee]

Ahhh, good morning children, stop messing about with your food, be quiet and eat. Tony, with your mouth shut, you look like a cement mixer, and you, Starz, put that bloody phone down and finish your granola....

[Tony Jordan]

Lmao...
Granola...
Those adverts kill me.
Gutentag mein freund lol

[...]

lol...good morning Gee ;) my granola is just plain boring compared to this place

[Gee]

Granola is no good for any bigger. If they panned round the room when making the adverts for it you'd see a hamster, lying on his back, banging a tune out of his organ, cigar in mouth saying, "even I wouldn't eat that shite "

[...]

Lol... you two! always make me smile x

[Gee]

Morning Starz, hope all is well. I read you are off to Prague soon. Do me a favour, track down Hannah Klicova and tell her she still has a pair of my socks. If she returns them I'll give her back the last few pieces of her heart. Oh, and apologise to her please for the way I let her out of my life......She'll understand.

[Tony Jordan]

Get thon vermin Britain's Got Talent. It can have steak!!

[Gee]

Rewind....bigger is bugger, no, not me thank you very much.

[Gee]

Mmm, steak..hung long...

[Tony Jordan]

Since puberty thanks fer asking... lmao

[Tony Jordan]

Ooh.. wasn't a question... my bad.
Like a blue steak though. *mouth watering now*

[...]

LOL...Gee! you heartbreaker!

[...]

You two are like the best kind of breakfast tv...lol

[Gee]

Yeahhhhhhhhh, I left the goal wide open and KABAMMMMMM, you were in like a shot...GOAAAAAAAAL..."I've just blown in from the windy city, the windy city is mighty pretty , but, ain't got what I got, no sireeeee......YOU"

[Gee]

DISCLAIMER...NO HEART EVER BROKEN INTENTIONALLY

[Gee]

Have a good evening

[Tony Jordan]

Break a pencil Starzy.

Hey Gee what ever happened to the Polish girl Ivana Rubbertitsov?
You've one in every port ya wee divil!!
Ooh gotta go myself.
Have a good one Gee!!
(Man-hugs)

[Gee]

Oh her, she married the son of an illegitimate llama farmer in Gdansk...never even got an invite. Have a good day, take care my friend, it's a bungle (intentional) and zippy out there..