unwelcome

unwelcome

A Poem by Tony Jordan
"

Farts in spacesuits ...yeah, as welcome as that

"


you just appear like 
toast sweat sogging my warm bread 
from the underneath

© 2017 Tony Jordan



Author's Note

Tony Jordan
venting in senryu

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Haha Tony...this is really one creative senryu. I love reading haikus and senryu poems so this one came as a surprise for me.
You described a natural process very smoothly and It surely didn't sound disgusting ;-)
I had a good laugh reading this !
Keep experimenting and keep writing.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

Gorthi I appreciate your visit. I like senryus but I don't think they like me.
I will keep .. read more



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Yeowee, I think someone needs to keep their distance! Maybe garlic would repel them?

Posted 7 Months Ago


hmm. that certainly is unwelcome. just be glad it didn't turn into a water bed. a good analogy. nice.

Posted 8 Months Ago


I've read through your poetry, and I love the fact that you can write a few words, and can be as simple as the one above, and you can write more complex stuff. I like the poem for/about Lennon, and your sexual poems truly depict the fire, the sparkle between women and men :)

Posted 8 Months Ago


Love it!! Nothing like a bit of venting in senryu. :))

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

Its very naughty. Senryus and haikus should be kept for the beauty and idiosyncracies of Life...lol .. read more
hahaha gosh! this surely got me "eewww". A very disgusting way of letting the person know that they are an unwelcome sight lol.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

It was this or scream. I haven't screamed in a while. Lol
Thank you again Atiba. I appreciat.. read more
Venting eh?
It sucks when you can't open a window to let the steam out...

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

No me neither. Psst... between me and you I thought it was higher.

Pepper

9 Months Ago

If it weren't for you it might be.
Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

Oh you...
*shuffling feet together*
Shucks ma'am...
Wow, now THAT is descriptive for sure! Certainly a unique senryu! Lydi**

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

Not the best use of this noble form but ...but...I have no defence lol
Thank you for gracing .. read more
"Toast sweat"? That sounds disgusting! 😛
Seems to me as if you were trying to prove a person rotten 😂😂😂
This made me laugh ☺

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

I think toast sweat has turned out to be one thing that is universally repugnant but has until now w.. read more
Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

Oooh where are my manners - thank you YumnaKay !!
Always a pleasure to see you.
Dr. YumnaKay

9 Months Ago

Haha yeah I really need to get my laughs back.. They seem to have disappeared..
You are welco.. read more
Haha Tony...this is really one creative senryu. I love reading haikus and senryu poems so this one came as a surprise for me.
You described a natural process very smoothly and It surely didn't sound disgusting ;-)
I had a good laugh reading this !
Keep experimenting and keep writing.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

Gorthi I appreciate your visit. I like senryus but I don't think they like me.
I will keep .. read more
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Just Yuck! haha...TJ this was an unpleasant delight...I guess I won't be having toast this morning.
Starz x

Posted 9 Months Ago


Gee

9 Months Ago

Have a good evening
Tony Jordan

9 Months Ago

Break a pencil Starzy.

Hey Gee what ever happened to the Polish girl Ivana Rubbertit.. read more
Gee

9 Months Ago

Oh her, she married the son of an illegitimate llama farmer in Gdansk...never even got an invite. Ha.. read more

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