unwelcome

Farts in spacesuits ...yeah, as welcome as that

you just appear like 

toast sweat sogging my warm bread 

from the underneath

Author's Note

venting in senryu

Reviews

[Manu]

Haha Tony...this is really one creative senryu. I love reading haikus and senryu poems so this one came as a surprise for me.
You described a natural process very smoothly and It surely didn't sound disgusting ;-)
I had a good laugh reading this !
Keep experimenting and keep writing.

[Tony Jordan]

Gorthi I appreciate your visit. I like senryus but I don't think they like me.
I will keep trying though - thank you very much for encouraging me!

[.]

And there goes my appetite for breakfast this morning..........

The ultimate insulting Senryu! Haha.

[Tony Jordan]

Thank you Doodley.
It would seem I am become Death, destroyer of appetites.
xD

[Vaporvision]

A funny analogy, but the punctuation could use a little bit of work. I have to ask, are you from the UK?

[Tony Jordan]

Hi P. E.
I never punctuate haikus or senryus for aesthetic and to lend lots of ambiguity to the piece. While that might be a redundant principle in this one, I find it's useful in the main.
Thank you once more P. E.

Tony
Preston, UK.

[Vaporvision]

Ah. My eyes are open. Aha, I figured you were from the UK. The kind of slang this piece uses is very unique.

[Tony Jordan]

*nodding head*
cool...

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Ewww, soggy bread the devil's opus...interesting poem, great vent, funny comments!

[Tony Jordan]

haha soggy bread seems to get everyone's top lip sneering.
Thank you for visiting another of my writes Queenie.

[KTizzle]

Ew, gross. Your contempt is very well expressed; I felt it in my nostrils. What a damper.

- Jazz

[Tony Jordan]

Jazz lover. Thank you for reviewing this. Thank you for everything.
I appreciate your words so much.
Nobody seems fond of soggy toast lol...

[DIVYA]

Yuck but very well done! :)))

[Tony Jordan]

Lol - thank you DIVYA
I appreciate your comments always...
:)

[Ken Simm.]

Hmmm. Anyone we know? I know some like that.
I always say to them 'You must come again when you can't stay so long'.
They just eat beans to get a cheap bubble bath.

[Tony Jordan]

Lmao. What an excellent frenemy you would make *wink*
Its no one on WC. Generically I think probably we all know someone like them.
Thank you for the belly laugh. Not so much for the floating Marie biscuit in my tea though... lol

[andrew mitchell]

last time I make you toast! Lovely brevity on something undesirable lol

[Tony Jordan]

Haha.
You are always welcome mate.
Thank you.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Unappealing imagery makes the point very nicely.
Wouldn't mind, in the least, Tony, if you were to fart in your own spacesuit--though, acquiring a spacesuit can't be all that easy. If you should locate one, however, make sure it's well sealed.
"Mean girl" senryu.

[Tony Jordan]

Lmao @ mean girl senryu. A new category? lol

I found a neat suit on Amazon with diaper snaps ~ for expelling, I guess.
Thank you Jimmy.

[Jimmy Yetts]

You're a good sport, Tony.
Thank YOU!

[Valentine]

I suck at this type of writing, I came to this write with my nose plugged.....5 7 5 I think you hit it. Valentine