Cruel

Cruel

A Poem by Tony Jordan
"

awful scene

"
The devastation was total

 a macabre
pot pourri of 
her young

the lucky ones
didn't see it coming
couldn't have

mother stood 
at the roadside
Her keening

piercing my soul

the perpetrator
of the wickedness
still present

seemingly unperturbed
by the carnage
all around

I did not bid usual
good wishes 
to this murderer

whose onyx beak 
bore blood and 
broken shell 

clues to the crime 

© 2017 Tony Jordan


Compartment 114
Compartment 114
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Author's Note

Tony Jordan
I saw a magpie raid on a tiny birds nest in my tree. The nesting pair showed great courage in trying to fend off the much bigger predator but it was useless. The magpie raid devastated the nest that I was watching for weeks.

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really cruel...
a vivid well done description of the terrible case.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Very horrific and touching . You are a master in your poetic eye and pen. We can draw a lot of lessons from those birds. Thank you for sharing and tackling...:::))))

Posted 6 Years Ago


Hello Tony,

WoW!!!

This one is heartbreakingly sad! And yet, the visuals are stunning in the mind's eye as this reader read through.

Wishing you well.

Alisa

Posted 6 Years Ago


Your syntax is spectacular. That final three lined stanza really drilled home not only the horrific nature of the event, but of violence itself. As easy to picture as though it were on a screen. Very, very well written poem.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I had a nesting of mourning doves right outside my bedroom window. The first nesting, both baby squabs took to flight two weeks after hatching. The second nesting, the two babies were days away from taking flight, when they were taken in the middle of the night by a predator. I have spent the past couple of months watching the vigilance and nurturing of these birds, my husband building a rooftop to protect them from the wind and rain, only to have them savagely killed. My heart breaks in reading this, Tony...thank you for your story!

Posted 6 Years Ago


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I saw a dead cat on the road
run over by a car
for some reason some images remain
and they touch your soul

i liked your sense of expression here
brief yet profound

Posted 6 Years Ago


Savagery often offends the poet's soul.
Where we--who are also a vital part of Nature--get that sensitivity is a question leading to even more profound questions.
A stunning portrayal, Tony!

Posted 6 Years Ago


You express well the shock and horror of the scene. Nature is often brutal and we know it, yet watching such events as this are still difficult. I'm sorry you lost the little pretty birds. Perhaps a cat will have magpie for supper.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Even without your author's note; I understood this instantly and from the first line to last it cuts deep.

Mankind is cruel in a different way of course, Nature we can perhaps forgive.

Beccy.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Haunting words that seriously gave me goosebumps. You have an amazing talent. Outstanding writing. :) Julie

Posted 6 Years Ago



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Tony Jordan
Tony Jordan

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