The gig's over

The gig's over

A Poem by Tony Jordan
"

Memories can be dissonant to the heart

"



Only 

twanging 
memories
via 
broken chords
and 
missing strings
remain 

the action 
got
too high ~
drew only 
blood

a ghostly refrain

repeats 
again
and 
again
and
again

© 2017 Tony Jordan



Author's Note

Tony Jordan
Capchta - fading !!

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Oh those twanging memories do tend to repeat again and again. I like the way you have written this poem- single words on a line have a great impact. Let's hope that the 'ghostly refrain' begins to fade (as the capchta says!) and the broken chords and missing strings can regenerate.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

1 Year Ago

I was going to concretise this into a guitar body shape but got lazy lol. Glad you caught the captch.. read more
Great Aunt Astri

12 Months Ago

You are welcome.



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creative and concise. the repetition in the last stanza is quite effective. can be tough to play those 'frets' ...

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Thank you Pete. I'm in the market now for a ukulele - much less fretting and less strings attached -.. read more
Pete

11 Months Ago

Lol. i could bring my bongos. straight jackets optional ...
Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Love that - two fat ladies 88, two little ducks 22, all on it's own number 1...
;)
It read like a guitar is played. I like your style!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

If it's the way I play...let me apologise golden lol
thank you
golden

11 Months Ago

Haha! I'm not very good at playing either >_< Oh well!
Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Oh I dont mean that!
I'm brilliant at the guitar. I just don't know which way to hold the bo.. read more
Again and again and again - now I'm getting high.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Those words - again and again and again - I tried to capture the end of a record. In the age of viny.. read more
Now, this is inventive, using guitar analogies the way you have. Very clever, my friend.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Thank you Samuel. I appreciate your review dear poet. :)
I can hear the broken chord/memory twanging...sad dissonance....feedback distortion echoes tears to infinity...Love this! Kudos!

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Ahh - the pup didn't want to divulge it's name for fear of identity theft eh? Wants anonymity eh? lo.. read more
Annette Pisano-Higley

11 Months Ago

Shhh- It's Pebbles...Arf! She blew her cover now!:) P.S. She's a rescue- terrier mixed with cattle d.. read more
Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Awww....she looks delightful.

(now just her social security number to get)
reprise, or reprieve; either way 'tis hard to get it right.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Aww Beccy - so good to see you.
Yes - overwind the strings and *SNAP!!* - underwind them and .. read more
Such simple words, such strong emotions! This is an amazing piece of poetry. Keep it up!

Love,
Vasilees

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

Simple is as simple does Vasilees ;)
Go raibh maith agat mo chara.
eh, the metaphorical exiled guitar... lovey done my friend, love the ending....reminds me of the times when a song i hate gets stuck in my head and i hum it :D

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

11 Months Ago

I think you have been intercepting my brainwaves Ana. My actual guitar IS in exile (to my friends) s.. read more
Ana B.

11 Months Ago

hahaha, nailed it eh :D
''ear-worms'' is a very fitting title.
Always a pleasure to .. read more
I was drawn in by your well-crafted title & the poem didn't disappoint! Love the ongoing metaphor of broken musical ideas, well-stated. The final stanza works well to be like the nagging memories.

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

12 Months Ago

thank you BG
I appreciate your review
(hugs)
True. Memories can be that and more, perhaps too much to bear and sometimes just going way overboard... I guess the ghostly refrains repeating themselves depends on how much you really want to hear them...
Interesting captcha btw lol my captchas are always gibberish haha :P

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tony Jordan

12 Months Ago

Always good to see angry young adorable friends on my poems.
:))
Dr. YumnaKay

12 Months Ago

lmaoo haha how adorable ;P :P
Tony Jordan

12 Months Ago

grrrrr :/
lol
x

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