The redemption of the keepers of the soil

Is this a poem or a story.I don't know.

Far beyond the horizon is an ocean of infinity.

This is where she flounders free of earthly restrictions.

Close to the surface she stalks crews of nautical victims.

She hungers for revenge against the keepers of the soil.

Sunken ships lie broken upon rocks of liquid depth.

She heeds no spoken word.

Her language whispers on the tide.

Seduction so powerful men perish in delight.

Breathlessly dieing in unadulterated sin.

 

To her surprise the adjacent sky hurled a star at her from heaven.

She accepted the star as a rare and precious gift.

She demanded the sea transform itself into a fluid treasure chest.

Where she could hide the starship being from the keepers of the soil.

The starship being was capable of magnificent adaption.

Breathing water from the wind .

Baring gills around his lungs.

She expressed intense admiration for his unique abilities.

He could swim with the dolphins,soar with the sea gulls,

and walk among wretched human beings.

 

Like destiny they fell in deep,and declared each other gods.

The starship being with sympathy for his precious Pisces princess,

swore a war against the arrogant pouring filth into her home.

He summoned fleets of UFO's to annihilate their cities.

Empires crash like blankets of ash on all the fertile ground.

Devastation far beyond the random ships she sinks at sea.

Remorse replaced her vengeful rage.

Embedding her in grief.

 

Alien to the feeling of his mermaid love.

He carries her over the threshold of his starship.

The rocket explodes into atmospheric dust.

They are scattered across the depths of endless night.

The starship being forever sworn to fade into her light,

to swim with her dolphins,soar with her seagulls,

and walk beneath her on fertile ground.

Till the sky and the ocean no longer exist,

The Pisces princess and the starship being shall oversee

the redemption of the keepers of the soil.

 

 

Reviews

[Leslie Philibert]

What I like here is the way you are not scared to employ really big images, the sea the sky, then some science fiction, so a good job, an interesting write.

[Rikkevi Rue]

vividly painted, rich with significance but most interestingly sewn with the lure of mythology and omnifarious existence! I particularly enjoyed the personification of the ocean, as living near the ocean and long being a beach comber I am receptive to her pull. That your write if reflective of the sentience of Nature endears.

Perhaps "Prose" would best describe it, though you have artfully woven poem and story into one piece. I say the most important factor is that it communicates and skillfully involves your readers. Very nicely done!

[brit]

This is really interesting. I read it twice, once sober and once stoned. Both times it was amazing, but this last time was especially brilliant... It reminds me of the end of the age of Pisces, and all the extraterrestrial news and speculation that is spreading around now. In 2012, will UFOs really come? Will they destroy our cities, as a gift of the starship being to the mermaid, and then dance off as the age of Aquarius advances?

The imagery is vivid and exciting, and it is a very interesting twist of characters, Mermaid and alien. Very unique, I would say!

Let's hope that extraterrestrials don't actually come to harm us, but I suppose that ultimately we are all one with everything, so everything happens with purpose. This poem really gets me thinking, though! It reminds me of a tale they might tell centuries after the end of the majority of the human world.

Keep up your excellent writing, it's very creative and captivating!

[Odayin]

That was wonderful. I really enjoyed the imagery and the great wordplay.
"To her surprise the adjacent sky hurled a star at her from heaven." I read that line twice because it sounded so great.
This poem made my mind whirl, keep up the great work

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Beautiful imagery with a mysterious feeling added to it.
Great job!

[TC Dunn]

very beautiful. Couldn't stop reading it. "Sunken ships lie broken upon rocks of liquid depth." what an interesting line. I just love how this flows.

[MOON]

Written like a poem , told like a story. Wonderful write.

[Neva Flores - Changeful..]

I adore tales like these, splendidly written

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the artwork and the story in the poem. I like the use of magic and the UFO's to make your point in this poem. I did like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Chris G. Vaillancourt]

Amazing piece of work