Dark Clouds

Dark Clouds

A Poem by Dahlia Phoenix

Dance through dark clouds
Fascination toward the world below
Let your wings spread


Melancholy with an open heart
Infusing ourselves to the vermin
Of what humans have become

Don't ever sleep
Let the rain flourish through your palms
Offering what a God never could


Vintage waves hitting the edge

Forsaken into one haven

Dark clouds that will dance

In a merciless gray


Rain pour down our vessels

To be cleansed

Enigmatic whispers never to be heard

Let the dark cloud be the silence of fall



© 2011 Dahlia Phoenix



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Dahlia Phoenix
Enjoy this new piece. I am pleased by the result.

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This is beautiful, and that's all i have to say!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


what a great write.I see we share the same interest in metal,very kool. I just seen Cannibal august25,2012 in Anaheim,ca. they fucken killed it!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I have always had an attraction for night clouds I even named a free jazz song after that so to read this poem was quite nice.

this poem is very dark to me UNFORGIVING yet content.
with lines like "merciless gray"
"Infusing ourselves to the vermin"
"Offering what a God never could"

only thing is I'm not sure why it's dark...
or who the vessels being cleansed are, but...
Some scholars say if the reader gets lost in the maze of metaphor
the reader should read it some more...
I'll come back to this. great imagery though.



Posted 5 Years Ago


"Rain pour down our vessels
To be cleansed
Enigmatic whispers never to be heard
Let the dark cloud be the silence of fall" Love that section good job

Posted 5 Years Ago


For some reason I love the line, "Vintage waves hitting the edge". This could be because of my love for vintage things, but other than that I really liked this poem. It had a dark feel to it, which is something I enjoy in poetry.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I like the poem. The repetition gave the poem strength. The lines were direct and create a vision of rain and the silence overtaking the poem. I like the ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


I loved it! Will be back for more...

Posted 6 Years Ago


Let the rain flourish through your palms
Offering what a God never could


Those were you best lines, I think. Keep at it.

Posted 6 Years Ago


This is an awesome poem, I really liked reading it :) Nice write.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I like the form. In fact *rereading* I like this poem a lot.
Melancholy with an open heart. Nicely done.

Posted 6 Years Ago



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Dahlia Phoenix
Dahlia Phoenix

Houston, TX



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