War poem

Get down, Get down

Bullets flying all around

Man down, Man down

keep going without a frown 

Dead bodies everywhere

I'm gonna have a nightmare

March on, March on

Have to fight until i'm gone

Reviews

[Mrs Mania]

Though short and simple, the song would make great lyrics. Personally, I recommend being more descriptive with your words. Also, try and avoid abbreviation in writing if you can. Instead of saying: "I'm gonna have a nightmare", try saying, "I am sure to have a nightmare". You need to broaden your horizons a little bit.

[Angie G]

Great write.. And loved the flow. Keep on writing!