War poem

War poem

A Poem by Jayden

Get down, Get down
Bullets flying all around

Man down, Man down
keep going without a frown 

Dead bodies everywhere
I'm gonna have a nightmare

March on, March on
Have to fight until i'm gone




© 2017 Jayden



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Though short and simple, the song would make great lyrics. Personally, I recommend being more descriptive with your words. Also, try and avoid abbreviation in writing if you can. Instead of saying: "I'm gonna have a nightmare", try saying, "I am sure to have a nightmare". You need to broaden your horizons a little bit.

Posted 1 Month Ago


Great write.. And loved the flow. Keep on writing!

Posted 1 Month Ago


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Added on September 19, 2017
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Jayden
Jayden

widnes, cheshire, United Kingdom



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