Spring Rainbows

I wrote this for my little sister. She likes rainbows. O_o

The joy of Spring.

Watching the clouds float past.

The sun playing a childish game.

Of hide - and - go - seek.

 

When leaves fall.

The birds push them to the sky.

The leaves kiss the sun.

In the motion of Spring.

 

A soft rain bends the flowers.

Even the mighty rose.

The rain fades with soft music.

The clouds roll away.

Like children down a hill.

 

The sun shines brighter.

After the clouds fade.

A bright ring of color.

Marks the blue sky.

 

The ring nearly fades.

At the coming of another.

Strong storm that rolls.

Over each ray of color.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[deleted]

This is absolutely awesome! I love the way you described the beauty of nature. I was intrigued by each and every one of your words. I especially loved the beginning lines. How you described the sun (playing childish games...hide and go seek). It was as if I was in the scene of this piece. The visual imagery was so thick that the reader was sitting in the same place with you as you wrote this poem. Excellent read! Keep exercising your gift. I look forward to reading more of your work. I am sure your little sister will cherish this piece for many years to come.

[CircusNerd]

wow, i love this. the descriptions were filled with vivid, sensory language and the imagery was tantalizing! the description of the rainbow was flawless in showing its sight appeal and i loved these lines

A soft rain bends the flowers.
Even the mighty rose.
The rain fades with soft music.
The clouds roll away.
Like children down a hill.

how true, it's like i'm sitting beside you watching this! wow again, i'm sure your little sister will love this! keep writing and getting better!!!

[Nicole]

Wow man, this was pretty amazing.
Its happy.
And its a refreshing feeling to read something happy, makes me all happy. xD
Amazing write.

[Marina]

This is great!

:P I really love the imagery in this. I love poems like this.
Sometimes people get so deep sometimes, and it's good to read a poem that gets straight to the point, at the same time being intricate.

"Like, hey! I love rainbows, they're pretty. 'Nuff said!"

And, hey! I love this poem (and rainbows), it's pretty! Nuff said!

[Rachael]

Very nice job.
Imagery is really good, and I can get a feel of a day just like that.
=]

[Dreamer (Kristen)]

I like how you described everything in the form of children, it has really good imagery. :)
It's a very sweet poem, I'm sure your sister loved it! :)

[Expression]

I really like it, it's really sweet of you to write something like this for your sister :')

[Alexandria]

i love this , wonderfuly amazing and well put , sort of put me into a playfull day dream
well done i love this peice hun !

[Edalene Connell]

I like the imagery here. Very beautiful.

[qaralynn]

really nice poem..just makes you happy XD

[Sseoni]

Wow! What a wonderful poem! It was beautifully written, wonderfully detailed, and greatly descriptive! Great use and variety of words! Amazing poem! :D