Dust

this is a bit random and not as intense as i planned :P

Dust away all our faults and lies
Make sure they get rid of our cries.

Dust off the pain of heart brakes
Remind us that there will be mistakes.

Dust away the memories of regret
Hope that we will forever forget.

Dust off the dirt and grim
That stuck to us through time.

Dust away the sorrow of death
Maybe it'll be gone in just one breath.

Dust off the deceit and blame
And just once it would leave as it came.

it doesn't matter what we do
the Dust will always come back to haunt us again...

Reviews

[Immortal Phantom]

a bit rushed, but supposedly good for writing dust as a regret or sadness. not your best but your other poems seem really good.

[.........]

The message is good, though, as you said, it is not nearly as intense as it could be. The last two lines are the best part, because it's true that things don't completely leave, even when intended to disappear. At times in this poem, the rhyme is a bit expected and sometimes it draws my attention away from its meaning. On the other hand, I still caught plenty of this poem and enjoyed it

[Black-Draped]

great job! (hi-five through computer) =P

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

i enjoyed this poem nice job !!! :D :D

[paradise]

i like