Oculus Animae

Oculus Animae

A Poem by Treo LeGigeo
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Six word story.

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Through common eyes see only blindly.

© 2013 Treo LeGigeo



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Author's Note

Treo LeGigeo
People who try to conform their beliefs to a prevalent view will only be obscured.

Written for a challenge: write a six word story with a title of something prominent in the world hidden in the story. I hid the word "money."

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Wow. Impressed , i initially clicked on this poem for its interestng and unique name, and im not gonna lie i was dissapointed to see such few words on the page.

But then i read them, i tend to hate one sentance poetry but this sentance is a story on its own, it speaks volumes. Intellegently though out.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Ah, you tricky b*****d.

Posted 7 Years Ago


I totally agree with the message in this 'story'. Good job

Posted 7 Years Ago


For me, this sentence didn't make sense. I kept re-reading it to try and understand it but no matter where I paused it didn't make any more sense than before. I get the meaning, there's nothing wrong with that, it's a wonderful meaning and I love how you expressed it; but the sentence just didn't work for me. It was almost just like a string of words put together with the necessary words inbetween cut out (I understand though how it can be so hard to write a six word story and I'm impressed that you could). But then, it's probably just me.
So, I'm impressed that you could say something so, in such few words, but to me the sentence didn't make sense. Oh and I really like what you named this.

Posted 7 Years Ago


interesting challenge -- nice job hiding money in there. Not sure if this counts as a poem or a fortune cookie though.


Posted 7 Years Ago


Wow. How did you say sOoo much with only 6 words?? Amazing. And what truth lies behind those words too. The number of conformists, especially around me, are exponentially high. Makes me feel so out of place being the only one who questions societal expectations & norms. While they run through their life blind, Im standing still with open eyes.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Very clever and insightful. Money inspires so much - evil and good and indifference.

Posted 7 Years Ago


That is very inciteful!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Interesting challenge! Challenge well met I would say love!
Wow!
An amazing piece:)
xx

Posted 7 Years Ago


Wow you've truly grasped such meaning behind few words in such a flowing saying. Well done it made thought as I had to read it twice thinking of it with its deep words. Nice and simple.

Posted 7 Years Ago



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Added on September 6, 2011
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Treo LeGigeo
Treo LeGigeo

Sydney, NSW, Australia



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I'm from Australia, so some people may find that I spell things differently. I love writing and have had a couple of publications of short stories and novellas under a pseudonym. I started .. more..

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