Chaos

Chaos

A Poem by Aislinn Gryffin ((Ashes))
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just a bit of random writing

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I am property of no one.

I belong to myself and myself only.
Do not attempt to own me.

Do not fence me in, I will escape.
Broken hearts I leave in my wake...
Mourning souls longing for deliverence and receiving rejection at my door...
If you value your heart avoid me at all costs.
The line between bravery and stupidity is thin,

And to reach my door you cross it.
Do not cry when I leave.

Do not mourn for the past, look to the future.
Do not stand and cry after me.

I must leave or risk my own destruction.
I must leave, and you must forget me. This is my way.
For I am destruction. I myself am the essence of all that is evil and unrighteouss.
I AM confusion; I AM unrest; I AM guile and deceit.
My name is spoken in awe by those who know me not.
My name is spoken in heartbroken, mourning distraught and disgust and regret

By those who indeed knew me, and knew me well.
The goddess Chaos is my name.

© 2008 Aislinn Gryffin ((Ashes))


Author's Note

Aislinn Gryffin ((Ashes))
*Editted on November 20*

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A great example of free form poetry, you handle the style with definite flair! I loved the varying line lengths, and you really get the point across that while chaos is seen as evil, it can be about being free at all costs. I have one question; when you wrote this, did you have a specific goddess in mind? It reminded me strongly of Eris (not sure I spelled that right).

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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A great example of free form poetry, you handle the style with definite flair! I loved the varying line lengths, and you really get the point across that while chaos is seen as evil, it can be about being free at all costs. I have one question; when you wrote this, did you have a specific goddess in mind? It reminded me strongly of Eris (not sure I spelled that right).

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I looooovee this =]

Posted 14 Years Ago


nice flow of thoughts and the presentation was well maintained...liked the read....

Regards,
Poetic Soul

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think that this is a fantastic write, I totally enjoyed reading this fine poem.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this poem because it has different lengths of lines. Sometimes poems with all the same lengths are repetitive if they aren't well written, but you wouldn't have had that problem because this poem was very well written. I also love the lines:

Do not cry when I leave.
Do not mourn for the past, look to the future.
Do not stand and cry after me.

All in all, fantastic.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I tend to make general comments M'lady until I know what the writer expects Many take offence at constructive criticism
I re read chaos I enjoyed your train of thought but as you write free form style. You writing when read aloud is choppy The differing line lengths make it so. I ama rhymed and metered poetry writer but e ven free form should flow smoothly read aloud and if itdoes not needs further work.
I offer this advice for you to heed or reject.

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Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this! I love the point of view you used and I love your vocabulary.
I also love the length. It's a brief but powerful piece. Amazing job.

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Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The goddess is a god in the female sense. A female god. Not a normal mortal woman.

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Posted 15 Years Ago


The Goddess is a woman

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Posted 15 Years Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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