My Tragedy

This tragedy

Chained to me

Holding me

Scolding me                ( I can't breathe )

 

It's harrowing

I'm despairing

In this pairing

Stop staring                ( Can you see me? )

 

I've tried stopping it

Crushing it, denying it,

Begging it,

I'm crying, please!        ( Make it stop! )

 

It's burrowing

Hiding, deceiving,

Inside of me, biting me,

Chiding me, why?         ( Can you help me? )

 

My heart is bleeding

My mind receding

Eyes unbelieving

Barely breathing         ( I'm lost... )

 

This is my plague

Life is my stage

My pen and my page

My life                      ( My tragedy )

Reviews

[papaed]

emotions pours through these words filled with undirected despair, undefined tragedy, inward focused "me" and "my" mixed with fear of "it" yielding a physical reaction. The parenthesis filled with reaching-out shouts for help and understanding. The emotion is palpable, but the only hint of a source for the pain and angst that I can place with this... is a youth escaping a parent while feeling chained to them but not yet able to be independent or self confident enough to form a secure, separate identity.
That is a tough time for most of us. If I've nailed it, then you did very well expressing the feeling.

papaed

[QuietPoet]

This was a deep emotional write. I felt your pain throughout the write. Very well done. I can relate to this one very much. Thanks for sharing.

[Suzanne C. Suber]

You feel very deeply. The sign of a great writer!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Great, I like the external thought going on, the questioning. Good poem.