Love Haiku

Love Haiku

A Poem by lauren emily
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My first haiku..EVER. lol. Tell me what you think

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Slowly coming in
Taking my breath away
Please don't ever leave

© 2008 lauren emily


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I hate to rain on the parade, but that's 5-6-5 syllables, not 5-7-5, like a traditional haiku. >_<

I did like it, though. It sounds natural, and simply nice.

Posted 14 Years Ago

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 Added on August 19, 2008

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lauren emily
lauren emily

Long Beach, CA



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Why 'ello there! Thanks for stoppin' by. My name is Lauren (previously my screen name was TwilightReader) and I'm 16. I love writing, good food, fast cars, interesting people, cemeteries, photograp.. more..

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