The thought process.

The thought process.

A Poem by Ryan Falzon - Tymon
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For the dead idea contest, poem stating where ideas go when they "die"

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The thought process.

 

People have always created things,

but before we can create, we must think

Think of the outcome, and the result it brings.

For some of the creations, just sink.

Once we have our thoughts in place,

Often written down for all to read

We can start increasing our pace,

and begin planting the seed.

 

But not all thoughts are brought to root.

Some stay written, and are never let loose,

Others are completely forgotten, and given the boot.

While some are stored away, for future use.

When we are stuck, and cannot go on,

We search for other thoughts which are not our own,

But belong to those who are long gone,

and left their thoughts for our throne.

 

The words of a friend of yours and mine,

“"The secret to creativity is knowing how to hide your sources."

and that man is Albert Einstein


© 2010 Ryan Falzon - Tymon



Author's Note

Ryan Falzon - Tymon
Would like some feedback on the concept, this one took a bit of thinking =)

Update: didn't get much reviews on this one, so I have a feeling isn't really liked. Please be honest do NOT hold your tongue!!

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I really like the concept of this whole poem because it could be said as somewhat true. The thoughts we have now are more or less influenced by the thinkers of the past. Though I like the concept, I think the poem is lacking some impact possibly because of how you ended it. Perhaps instead of stating the quote, you could rephrase it in your own way instead. Rephrasing and basically scrapping the last line would be, in a way, supporting your concept of hiding sources to be "original." It's a nice thing to play around with, and I'd like you to delve deeper into that if you choose to revise this poem. I hope to read more of your works in the future.

Keep Writing! ^___^

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.



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I really like the concept of this whole poem because it could be said as somewhat true. The thoughts we have now are more or less influenced by the thinkers of the past. Though I like the concept, I think the poem is lacking some impact possibly because of how you ended it. Perhaps instead of stating the quote, you could rephrase it in your own way instead. Rephrasing and basically scrapping the last line would be, in a way, supporting your concept of hiding sources to be "original." It's a nice thing to play around with, and I'd like you to delve deeper into that if you choose to revise this poem. I hope to read more of your works in the future.

Keep Writing! ^___^

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Congrats on your winning poem. So well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


I like this, but I think I want you to go a little bit deeper. Maybe use more vivid images to convey what you mean. Use metaphors for the messages you are getting across. I must say you really have a great control on the rhyme scheme you work. I think maybe the reason for it not getting too many reviews is that it is so deep the reviewer doesn't know exactly what to say in response.

Posted 7 Years Ago


An interesting kind of 'translation' of how ideas come about, and their importance. It is important -if not reassuring- to think beyond the present time when creative thought is born; should it not be noticed, let alone valued, during our own time, it is important that it exists at all. As the penultimate verse describes, there is much value in history. One day -though now it may remain obscure- maybe a thousand years from now, someone will discover a piece of work professing such ideas and be influenced and awed by the foresight and imagination it contains.
I believe that the mere thought itself is important - provided it has been thought of at all...! Its existence, spoken or unspoken will somehow, somewhere, some day (if not today) have a bearing upon life and the world.
Good poem, food for thought.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Personally, I wouldn't judge a poem by the number of reviews, because i found this to be quite wise and hold a vast ammount of perception, which in turn,
draws the reader to ponder, in ways it speaks about humanity itself.
and the creative nature of our force. awsome job, keep it up

Posted 7 Years Ago



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