Raining on the land.

Poem about money and greed.

The rain pours on the land,

feeding and nurturing it by hand.

The land grows and the rain stops

for it does not need anymore drops.

The land is grateful, does not greed,

and only takes the rain when in need

 Else it shares it with the rest

whom are merciless.

They absorb everything in sight

killing each other in the fight

The never ending bloodshed

 ignoring those who bled.

The Winners raise up and claim power,

from which is their personal flower,

the losers bow down, hoping for shares,

as the winner laughs,points and stares.

He is praised, and becomes king

treated with love, and offered rings

When the day comes that he buys the town,

That is the day, when the winner drowns.

Author's Note

Created for the money contest

Reviews

[J.M. Barrett]

A very creative subject matter for the "money" contest!

I really liked this verse:

"The land is grateful, does not greed,
and only takes the rain when in need
Else it shares it with the rest
whom are merciless."

Also, the way you tied it up:
"That is the day, when the winner drowns."

Wonderful poem!

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes in the USA. We are one of the worst separation the rich from the poor. 3% own 97 % of the wealth. Worst then China and India. A powerful poem. The poor pay for the sins of the rich man. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

This is very good. The transition from nature to man is smooth. The point plays out nicely. Well done.

~True

[A.Lee]

I like this. My only comment was the line "whom are merciless". I felt like it needed a few more syllables to fit right. Maybe "those of whom are merciless". Nice work overall though.

[Ruth]

Really well voiced!
A great poem!
xx

[Jeweliet]

I agree with the other reviewers, the contrast between humanity and nature is subtle yet effective, good write =]

[Ryan Falzon - Tymon]

@R.Nella it's a reference to another one of my poems, take a look at our flower.

[R. Nella]

Good work. I like the contrast between humanity and nature. The way you have used 'flower' is unfamiliar to me, so I had to look it up.

[Devons]

Excellent poem. High standard is The standard.
The analogy between nature and human nature is very significant and the imagery it creates is very powerful in illustrating its message.
The line in the poem which connects the first part of the comparison to the second is quite subtle, by referring to Man as "the rest" - and it almost seamlessly moves on to show these shortcomings, as though to float the reader along the channel the poem itself is on.
Very good. Technique also, practically impeccable.