One Day.

 I hailed a cab; homeward bound it would take me,

One appeared straight away, something unusual aroused me.

Something not quite right, something hidden from sight.

I’m sure I’ll be fine, I said, and hopped in with fright.

 

Smiling politely, he sped down the street;
He sped passed by my house, never once slammed his feet.

To a cliff face we rolled, where he swallowed me whole,

Then he leapt off the edge, through the clouds we did fall.

 

Deep down below us, we came to a halt,

Landing on the seabed, as hard as asphalt.

Surrounded by turquoise, by all types of creatures,

He lay on his back and fell fast asleep with the fishes.

 

In the belly of subsidence, sitting in silence,

Thoughts of such nonsense, I ordered his conscience.

Not a soul to come save me, no one to amuse,

I guess this is home now, so I kicked off my shoes. 

Reviews

[Jeannear]

love this poem and the story line aspect of it :)

[tyson]

thank you!

[Epipsychologist]

Hey. I thought I'd responded to this, but sometimes my internet gets shoddy when I hit post and the cursor lingers in internet limbo.

This is a fun kind of surrealist piece. The light tone contrasts the darker details of the narrative, making it sound almost like a folk tale that gets passed down. Or like a cautionary tale, but not quite. Nice write.

[tyson]

I wrote this piece a while ago for uni, to be honest. Maybe a year or two ago. It was for a poetry assignment and my idea was based upon the fact that, I've always loved children's books where they have a fun whimsical tale in that free-form sort of rhythm, and then are summed up with short but sweet moral. I also wanted to capture that same level of innocence, you know, with simplistic language, because I find that it leaves for less distraction and helps push that conclusion or moral right out of the page. (It doesn't help that I was going through an Orwell stage). Thanks again!

[Epipsychologist]

Haha, I could see how the moral would be, don't get into strange cars.

[Laminators Dubai]

that was fan!
thanks for sharing ^^

[wordwarrior]

LOL, this really made me smile. A wonderful poem of nonsense with great rhyme and flow. Loved it!

[tyson]

thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[nostal]

This flow makes 2pac envious.

[tyson]

ahaha, I wish! thanks though brother