Mmh.. I actually had to look up the meaning of 'to go limbo', as I wasn't familiar with that expression. I've tried to figure out the meaning of this piece, but I don't think I've succeeded in doing so so far. Maybe you can help me a little bit? Excuse me, I'm not really good at finding the meaning of a piece, shame on me..
Anyway, with that said, the atmosphere of this piece is really dark and captivating. Deep in the woods, underneath the mighty trees.. These lines perfectly describe the atmosphere. Sometimes you've just got to let your hands do the writing instead of your head. The brain is not really an expert at penning down feelings. This piece was a wonderful creation of just your hands :)
One tiny error you made:
- "A scroll attached to it's claws": I believe it should be 'its' here instead of 'it's'. I always have trouble determining whether it should be written with an apostrophe or not, but I believe in this case it should be 'its'.
Besides that, great, short poem :)
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8 Years Ago
Thank you for your views! I greatly appreciate them. Limbo simply means an uncertained period of wai.. read moreThank you for your views! I greatly appreciate them. Limbo simply means an uncertained period of waiting for something or someone.
I tried to signify the essence of time and love here. The 'two lives' signifies two lovers actually. A message was sent by one but wasn't received by the other. They wait but neither of them get it. This was meant to be because maybe fate had other plans for them.
This was just a thought lingering in my head like all the previous #musings that I have posted till now. Small random thoughts which I pen down.
And it's certainly no shame when you can't figure out something. You just have to ask. Everyone is always ready to help you understand something. So don't worry and whenever you have doubts, just ask them away. :)
Glad you liked this and thanks again for reading this. And I will certainly make the correction. Thanks for that too mate. ;)
8 Years Ago
Ah okay, I certainly get what you mean by that. Now that I take a look at it again, it actually make.. read moreAh okay, I certainly get what you mean by that. Now that I take a look at it again, it actually makes sense. I was just wondering: do you believe in a fate that cannot be changed, or do you think someone's fate can be changed? Do you acknowledge the existence of a 'fate' in the first place?
8 Years Ago
I believe that most of the time, ourfate is in our hands. We creatr our own fate and our own destiny.. read moreI believe that most of the time, ourfate is in our hands. We creatr our own fate and our own destiny. But, sometimes it tends to slip from our hands and goes not the way we had planned. Fate can be changed, by us and by other factors too. If you see closely, a lot of things have a part in who we are. It's not just us who construct and create our life, there are a lot of other factors too. And sometimes, we fail in controlling those factors and thus maybe reach a place we hadn't planned to reach. Or find ourselves somewhere we didn't want to go.
8 Years Ago
Maybe our fate already knew that we wanted to change our own fate? Think about it ;)
But we create our own fate. So it implies that we have to know that ourselves. Right? :)
8 Years Ago
Haha, I see what you mean. But in my opinion, fate is an omniscient Oracle. Yes, on the one hand we .. read moreHaha, I see what you mean. But in my opinion, fate is an omniscient Oracle. Yes, on the one hand we can create our own fate, but on the other hand, our fate already knew what we had been planning in our lives. So I agree with you to an extent ;)
Oh no! You have a knack for eliciting emotion from readers with short orders of words. You use your gift well!
Amidst the fog and foliage...you really conjure a sense of lost and abandoned here and the hopelessness of the bird. So good! W O W !
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8 Years Ago
Thank you so much Zyle. And yes, this wasjust like the rest of my musings where I tried to portray s.. read moreThank you so much Zyle. And yes, this wasjust like the rest of my musings where I tried to portray something by using as minimum words as possible. So glad for your wonderful review.
:)
Short and expressive! You certainly know how to get the readers to think! :)
And this poem was great too.. Sad, but great ;)
I assume 'two lives' here meant two lovers ?
Messages being sent from one not reaching the other and the disappointment !
Great write brother! :) Keep Writing!
Was kinda hard to understand 'cuz my style writing is different from yours! :)
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8 Years Ago
You understood this quite well my friend.
Glad you liked this.
And yes, my the.. read moreYou understood this quite well my friend.
Glad you liked this.
And yes, my themes in my writings are quite darker then regular themes and I quite enjoy that. Glad you enjoyed it as well. :)
8 Years Ago
I sure did enjoy this one! And i love it when i as a reader have to think ;)
Your welcome! :).. read moreI sure did enjoy this one! And i love it when i as a reader have to think ;)
Your welcome! :)
This must happen, have happened...the letter that never gets delivered...
the sender, forever, wonders why there is no reply
The receiver, forever, waiting or not knowing.
Deeply sad, fateful words
Very good
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8 Years Ago
And they linger in limbo. :)
Thank you for your golden words. And yes, it's indeed sad. But t.. read moreAnd they linger in limbo. :)
Thank you for your golden words. And yes, it's indeed sad. But that's the way life is sometimes.
Glad you liked this and thank you for stopping by. :)
Mmh.. I actually had to look up the meaning of 'to go limbo', as I wasn't familiar with that expression. I've tried to figure out the meaning of this piece, but I don't think I've succeeded in doing so so far. Maybe you can help me a little bit? Excuse me, I'm not really good at finding the meaning of a piece, shame on me..
Anyway, with that said, the atmosphere of this piece is really dark and captivating. Deep in the woods, underneath the mighty trees.. These lines perfectly describe the atmosphere. Sometimes you've just got to let your hands do the writing instead of your head. The brain is not really an expert at penning down feelings. This piece was a wonderful creation of just your hands :)
One tiny error you made:
- "A scroll attached to it's claws": I believe it should be 'its' here instead of 'it's'. I always have trouble determining whether it should be written with an apostrophe or not, but I believe in this case it should be 'its'.
Besides that, great, short poem :)
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thank you for your views! I greatly appreciate them. Limbo simply means an uncertained period of wai.. read moreThank you for your views! I greatly appreciate them. Limbo simply means an uncertained period of waiting for something or someone.
I tried to signify the essence of time and love here. The 'two lives' signifies two lovers actually. A message was sent by one but wasn't received by the other. They wait but neither of them get it. This was meant to be because maybe fate had other plans for them.
This was just a thought lingering in my head like all the previous #musings that I have posted till now. Small random thoughts which I pen down.
And it's certainly no shame when you can't figure out something. You just have to ask. Everyone is always ready to help you understand something. So don't worry and whenever you have doubts, just ask them away. :)
Glad you liked this and thanks again for reading this. And I will certainly make the correction. Thanks for that too mate. ;)
8 Years Ago
Ah okay, I certainly get what you mean by that. Now that I take a look at it again, it actually make.. read moreAh okay, I certainly get what you mean by that. Now that I take a look at it again, it actually makes sense. I was just wondering: do you believe in a fate that cannot be changed, or do you think someone's fate can be changed? Do you acknowledge the existence of a 'fate' in the first place?
8 Years Ago
I believe that most of the time, ourfate is in our hands. We creatr our own fate and our own destiny.. read moreI believe that most of the time, ourfate is in our hands. We creatr our own fate and our own destiny. But, sometimes it tends to slip from our hands and goes not the way we had planned. Fate can be changed, by us and by other factors too. If you see closely, a lot of things have a part in who we are. It's not just us who construct and create our life, there are a lot of other factors too. And sometimes, we fail in controlling those factors and thus maybe reach a place we hadn't planned to reach. Or find ourselves somewhere we didn't want to go.
8 Years Ago
Maybe our fate already knew that we wanted to change our own fate? Think about it ;)
But we create our own fate. So it implies that we have to know that ourselves. Right? :)
8 Years Ago
Haha, I see what you mean. But in my opinion, fate is an omniscient Oracle. Yes, on the one hand we .. read moreHaha, I see what you mean. But in my opinion, fate is an omniscient Oracle. Yes, on the one hand we can create our own fate, but on the other hand, our fate already knew what we had been planning in our lives. So I agree with you to an extent ;)
Oh... This is one of your beautiful poems! It's short and captivating. I wonder just what happened to the other. I love the scenery and as well as the melancholic and somber atmosphere you created. Thanks a lot for sharing this one. :)
The poem has such a wonderful atmosphere of mystery, in its imagery of deep woods, fog, a message sent but the messenger dying. And then the two lives going into limbo, perhaps because of the message?
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8 Years Ago
Yes. Depicts two lovers actually. Both waiting, longing for a message. Waiting for an undefined peri.. read moreYes. Depicts two lovers actually. Both waiting, longing for a message. Waiting for an undefined period of time. :)
Thank you Solar for taking the time out to read this. Thank you for your kind words too.
8 Years Ago
Ah the message sent...not received...
8 Years Ago
Fate had other plans.
8 Years Ago
did you add 'mighty' - even without that it worked [in terms of sound]
8 Years Ago
No. I added foliage instead of darkness. Fog and foliage. Kinda adjusted the sound more I guess. :P
yes foliage adds to the setting - also the use of foliage adds to the sense of covering the message/.. read moreyes foliage adds to the setting - also the use of foliage adds to the sense of covering the message/messenger
8 Years Ago
Yes, I realised the same after reading the piece a few more times and I thought, this word might do .. read moreYes, I realised the same after reading the piece a few more times and I thought, this word might do the work! :)
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