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Detached

I would have loved
For you to be here 
Right now
With me
As I am lost between
Fragments of moments 
And as my thoughts get tangled 
Everytime I try to put them into
Wor(l)ds 
Come and go
Leaving me awake 
In-betweens

Author's Note

As you might notice in the future, the tittle of my writings is made up of random letters and numbers. I actually don't like giving a name to what I write. It feels like that would limit and give a shape to my writings, and I like whatever that comes out of me to remain shapeless and timeless. I also like to think of what I write as "moments" or "thoughts" rather than poetry. I hope you will enjoy them and any review/feedback is much appreciated.

Reviews

[Alejandra Marie]

Very unique naming system. Great poem as well. Interesting structure and lots of feeling. You really get the sense of being fragmented by reading this. Very relate-able. I think everyone has felt this way at least once in their lives.

[ukcnn_]

I am glad my poem gave you that sensation and that you could relate to it. :)

[Justin]

that was really good!!! people come and go but people who stick with you stay in your life forever :)

[ukcnn_]

Thanks and you're absolutely right. :)

[Justin]

your welcome, it is the truth, i cant wait to read more of your material :)

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

I like the fact you didn't give this a proper title, it makes the piece a little more unique and interesting. It definitely caught my attention. as for the actual piece you have here I am definitely a fan of the simplicity you have befriended in these lines. The emotion stands out and is powerful, you set the tone well and with such easy. awesome write.

[ukcnn_]

Thank you for your kind words, I really appreciate your review!

[thumbelina]

Short but effective. I really like how you've played around with the words and allowed yourself to be free and expressive with your writing. It works so well!

[ukcnn_]

I am really glad this was to your liking, thank you!

[Diana Lynn]

This is very interesting and I also really like your naming system.

[ukcnn_]

Thank you, I am glad you like it. :)