Seasick

Breathing stagnant air. The sun shines through the window

like dusk. The blank look on my face as I

pour another warm glass of whatever is in this glass

bottle. Ancient thoughts echo:

What am I not enough of.

What part of me is there too much of.

All the things I would have done, am still capable of doing.

The time you spend watching him play video games,

watching paint dry, knowing it makes him happy.

 

You’re favorite pastime: plotting new land masses on your Jr. Cartography set. I’d hire an entire navy so you could scour the already-searched seas. I’d crumble up

tired old countries, toss the crumbs helter-skelter into the ocean. The thrill of finding each and every Easter Egg Island would light up your face like a beautiful Christmas tree blinking bright blue

glass lights, visible from space. And still you spend your time watching television in the

footy pajamas he makes fun of you for wearing.

I, for one, am quite jealous of them.

 

A knock at my door as I plop into the lawn chair

that lives in my living room. The thought of human interaction makes me cringe.

I turn up the special on polar bears and wait for whoever it is to walk away, give up on whatever they think they saw in me.

And that’s just what you do.

Reviews

[Riding the Rainbow]

Very touching and profound piece.
You really touched my heart.

[TheReal]

"What am I not enough of.

What part of me is there too much of. "

i LIKE THIS :)

[Lily]

really really nice, flows well and has one of those heart-drop endings.

[koi zaire]

it's really cool. you could turn it into a song if you did not think about it and added a couple of more words.

[luna11]

I love this! You could really make this into a nice song.
Well done.
:D

[Lowesy]

I like this, there seems to be little flow to it and it's hard to make get a rhythm, I even tried singing it (because of rjrodriquez's comment) but I lost rhythm quite quickly. But, the words you're using and the story you're telling are really good, I also like your descriptions

[rjrodriguez]

This could be a really great song, work on the tune and nevermind if it rhymes or not. have you ever listened to panic! at the disco songs? You could be the next Ryan Ross, considering you're name IS Ryan. haha